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I found this poem I wrote ages ago and thought I'd share. Read if you have nothing better to do, I guess :P



In his head, he has an image of radiant lining.
An ideal undying, the perfect man, shining.
A man who can take on the world and win
A being beyond logic, surely without a twin.

His eyes are fixed on the man worth admiration
Steadfast as a pilgrim on a paved road of imitation
"If I could even be half of what he is
Mine would be pride, mine would be bliss"

Worldly desires pull him by his wrist
Away from perfection, he cannot resist
Every time he struggles to return to the light
They are there once more to bring back the night

He looks for motivation, to the man's gleaming face
"Will I ever escape my demons and leave this place?"
But the routine of failure has been set in stone
The perfection he seeks will never be his own.

The man looks on with pure disgust
At the stumbling fool, fallen in the dust.
Once more he will try to rise and tread,
But too little, too late! He is already dead.

Loved ones now gather to mourn his demise
Blind to his fall, they remember his rise
His image seeps into young hearts, he's forever sighing
At those who try to reach him, the new man shining

good

Thanks :]

Very cool. Like the message. I think it's true for a lot of creative works, as the creator you always see all the flaws, all the little tricks you get away with. What I mean is: Others may look at your painting and see it as a glimpse into a fantastical world but to the painter it always remains oil on canvas with a hundred little flaws where things didn't quite work out.

It's basically impostor syndrome in a poem lol. Though, I think listening to others talk about your work really helps deal with any self-dissatisfaction. Thanks :]

I love this.

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I loved it. its pretty relatable, mostly due to the fact that it reads as a story of a man pursuing and becoming a perfect ideal, and the struggle and dissapointment that comes with it, something every human knows all too well. Thanks for sharing!

Thanks for reading :D