Player Comments on Hobbit Gimmick Period 3

What just happened, I blinked and I missed it?

But seriously though, this game was far too short for survival story. Survival stories are supposed to have your character go through so many trials, not just to be able to kill a bird with a butter knife and just go back to camp where the game ends... then what? What happens to our character, is he found, is he killed, did the bear come back to maul him for nabbing some of his hidden honey?

The grammar in this isn't the worst I've see, but it's also quite far from being any good for a story, especially one like this.

Now, I like the survival genre and I really would've liked to try to survive in a forest at a risk of being killed by bears, or maybe accidentally swallowing some poisoned berries, that would have been nice.

But thanks to all these mistakes, I'm rating this game a 2/8.

Hm, this game is far too short for what it's trying to do and also unrealistic (have you ever actually killed a bird with a butter knife? I imagine it's pretty hard to do). I assume this is some sort of test for Boy Scouts or campers though from the title I was expecting a parody... make it far longer, realistic and consider transferring it into quiz format as it might be easier than extending the storyline (why am I in the woods with all this crap? If I was going into the sort of place where bears lived I'd bring a rifle as opposed to a small piece of cutlery).
Assuming this is a genuine effort I recommend you rework it because the idea has some potential.

Well... that was boring.

Thanks for telling me the game is over, but I really think saying "end game" is good enough.
Anyways, it was alright. Really short though.

Surprisingly short. Anywhere from two to maybe four links long. It's a great idea - a survival story - but it'd be great if it could be expanded. I'd love to see this story with more detail and just plain longer, and maybe it'd be something interesting.

No grammar mistakes I could find. No real plot though, just survive or die. pretty short too.

Hm... I'm guessing that this is a school project (Period 3) and we didn't see the prompt... Maybe, if so, make the prompt a part of the first bit?
And maybe a few more options at a few different points?

(PS- The maturity seems a bit underrated, as you are killing something with a knife to obtain food and a bear might kill you)
(PPS- Its good so far, though)

3/8