Player Comments on Hot dog

there was at least some effort put in to the story, but, no where near what it it should be like.

There are quite a few spelling and grammatical errors. The formatting is also off. If you want people to enjoy your writing, you should proofread it before publishing it, use proper sentence and paragraph structure, and ensure there is a plot. On a website like CYA, you should also work to make paths and options that allow the reader to feel more control in the outcome.

Tell your teacher she made a dire mistake.

VERY promising start and for that I COMMEND YOU for making a decent game, but...

Then you pulled out the random humor, and everything went down hill. I should've guessed from the title that this would be an 'omg so random' game, but I honestly had hopes based on the intro that it would be a good game with a completely unfitting title.

Good luck with improving. :(

-Charaxes