Player Comments on Island of Dr. Moreau

This is better than a lot of school projects we've gotten, but still pretty mediocre. It's basically just a short summary of the books events, and there really isn't any way to take it off the rails of the established plot.

Grammar was mostly okay, but you could vary your sentence structure a bit, it gets pretty samey and dull. And in a couple of places I noticed you drop from second person POV (you) into first (I, me).

Including some dialogue here and there and some sensory details would add more immediacy to the parts that were supposed to contain action and emotion. You want the reader to get wrapped up in your writing, but this reads with all the drama of a "how I spent my summer vacation" essay.

I think modern audiences would have trouble understanding why the main character didn't intervene more dramatically upon realizing Moreau was torturing animals, that could've been a good jumping off point for your own original story branch that allowed you a little more creativity.

Meh. The few reset game links were highly annoying as the story was not interesting enough to want replay.

Great