Player Comments on Labyrinth of Secrets

If she doesn't have her memories, how does she know that her name's Anna?

Parts of this storygame were a bit difficult to read, thanks to it slipping from third person to second person and mixing up the tenses.I was immediately intrigued by the opening scene of this storygame, but...then there was a lot of reading, and I felt that learning about the history of the world through conversation rather than reading would have felt more engaging.

This storygame was also very linear, which was a bit disappointing, as there were only two endings total. And both of those implied that Anna's memory loss and the whole thing with the labyrinth was basically a whole cycle that kept repeating, which...I wanted to know why. So neither ending felt very satisfactory, to be honest.

I feel like the whole name thing was supposed to be some kind of big reveal, but it just didn't hit right...and I was confused about why she automatically assumed her name WASN'T Anna (as well as why she'd assumed it was in the first place).

I would love a longer, more detailed storygame about this world and the characters...especially considering what was learned in the library. Anna wasn't really that interesting of a character, but perhaps she could be in a longer, more detailed storygame.

The premise is intriguing and I find myself growing fonder of high fantasy settings through stories like this. I think a lot here could translate into a full story with some work on characterization and rhythm (and less linearity.) I was not so much interested in Anna as the world itself. She seems like a means for the story to proceed rather than being a full being herself.

Regardless, nice work for 24 hours!