Player Comments on Lebisyma

I was expecting this storygame to be a bit longer, to be honest. The idea was a bit interesting, even if the title did make me think of lesbians.

I think this storygame didn't have enough information about the important things, while information dumping too much about what was completely unnecessary. The very first choice didn't have any impact on the storygame...and the same could be said for the other choices. There were two endings that I found, but no real choices to get there.

I definitely think this storygame could benefit from being expanded. The page where the player character takes a closer look at the shopkeeper seemed to contain a plot of a completely different story...and the whole mention of the thieves' guild suggested a deeper world that I would have been interested in seeing more of.

Unfortunately, what I read of this storygame was a bit boring...but there was potential here that I'd like to see explored in an expanded version of this.

This story could benefit from less crude/modern language. At times it feels more like an army man’s personal diary than something deeper. The writing is mostly telling instead of showing and lacks personal flair that would characterize the main character more.

Also I keep reading Lebisyma as Lesbian-a. Might be a personal issue though.