Player Comments on Love's journey through the woods Part 1

To add to previous comment, because I forgot since I still have human tendencies, the story is repetive and, though fairly well written, the mainl problem is capitilazion errors.

It was ok and fairly well written though I'm not really sure how it's romance since it mainly focused on your life out of college, also *slight spoiler, no details*, I found it strange that even after I knew about Sam I called him repeatedly, that didn't make sense.

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I love this I must read part 2

Work on your grammar, make sure the choices you integrate within the story actually matter, and develop your plot more efficiently. Proofreading could actually help a lot too. Also, 'To be continued...' endings are completely taboo within the cyoa genre - or atleast in my opinion they are.
Work on improving your skills as a writer.

Needs MORE. . .

Not that much of an actual game... I have spotted a few grammar problems, I'll let you notice them.

Also, this too short, the pages were also too short and lacked any details whatsoever, it's mediocre for a starter, you can improve, I'm sure of it!

I love this. I like that it's the first game that i DIDN'T die!

There's no real choices as you just keep going round in circles. Needs to be planned better and branch off into different story arcs with different outcomes.

Love!! crazy!!

This needs editing. There are no real choices in the story and lots of infinite loops. Not much of a storyline and games with 'Part 2' just annoy me.

Absolute garbage. Frequently tossed through infinite loops. No real choices.

good job

The story was generally okay, though kind of boring. The amount of grammar mistakes relating to capitalization should be fixed. I also find that ending each piece of dialogue/page with "do you" only makes more work for yourself, and can annoy the reader. Otherwise, it's a passable 4/8.

Your spelling and grammar were fairly good. One thing I noticed is that you would occasionally write your dialogue as if you were writing a script, while other times you wouldn't. A story-game is not a script, and you should avoid writing it like one. More importantly, however, you should focus on consistency. I also noticed a few, small capitalization issues that should be fixed rather soon. As far as the actual story goes, I think the idea is boring and clichéd. There are literally a million other love and dating games like this. Still, you did seem to put a bit of effort into the planning and writing of the game, so I give you a 4/8.