Player Comments on Morning Madness
There are some things that can definitely be fixed here.
It's short. I understand that this is supposed to be just the morning, but it is short. Now, on the other hand, if you turned Morning Madness into Monday Madness, then you could at least have a whole day instead of about four choices.
It lacks detail. I want to know more about me. I want to know more about my crush. I want to know more about the school! All of those things would be great detail to put in.
There seems to be no good endings. Apparently what music you listen to influences your mood and therefore what you will say/do to the girl. That's a little questionable, but if you want to go with that then sure, I'll go with it. But it seems that no matter what, you get a bad ending. Maybe there is a good ending and I just didn't find it, but here's a hint: no one likes a storygame where you can't get a good ending.
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AllThatIsGold
on 1/10/2016 12:49:51 PM with a score of 0
This game needs to be considerably more fleshed out. I appreciated the multiple endings, but I noted that I could take seemingly different paths to reach same conclusions. Your game is way too linear and abrupt and you need to expand much from what you already have, which can be tough considering you based this off a morning routine. You end this story too early and leave your readers wishing for more, which is a shame considering you have shown you can write fairly decently.
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FazzTheMan
on 7/5/2015 1:50:27 AM with a score of 0
This has too many problems.
First off, it's short as hell. I pressed about five links which led to pages with half a paragraph on them.
The storyge had a huge lack of branching, and no matter what you do you end up having to choose between three bands to listen to. These bands for some reason effect what you say to your crush.
The plot was cliche and quite boring to be honest. Oh, you wake up, go to school, and talk to your crush. THE END.
Then we have the part where we literally can't get past our crush. Not only that, but everything we do leads to a crappy ending that says "What is wrong with you?" Seriously, you can't insult the reader if you won't even give us one good ending.
Then we had a few grammar screw ups. For example, you didn't space some of the sentences properly.
Sorry. I'm gonna give you a 1/8. Try harder.
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MinnieKing
on 1/30/2017 7:31:28 PM with a score of 0
CLASS IS MORE IMPORTANT THAN A CRUSH!!! I did the right thing. STUPIDITY.
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— Kate on 5/26/2016 8:12:10 PM with a score of 0
Too short, too boring, and no way to win or get past the part with your crush. She's like she's there to end the game like a ticking time bomb in a smokehouse.:(
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Gamechannger78
on 3/22/2016 4:05:28 AM with a score of 0
Every ending you get it says what's wrong with you, jeez this person sucks.
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jayfeather808
on 5/10/2015 9:21:47 AM with a score of 0
Possibly intriguing insight into the author's own life I suspect but we want to read stories about things outside our day-to-day experiences :)
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Will11
on 3/6/2015 11:55:01 PM with a score of 0
it wasn't bad it was good but it could be longer and I want to be a girl
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— maiya on 11/27/2014 11:42:48 AM with a score of 0
Seems cool but too short and no way to win all paths goto a bad ending
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NokadoThe
on 10/18/2014 10:00:04 AM with a score of 0
horrible, yet fun
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— bob on 6/9/2014 10:24:43 PM with a score of 0
There are no good endings. Why? Next time, I suggest you make a good ending, even if it's hard to get. All bad endings makes people get frustrated with your game and rate it low.
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bjhovey
on 5/3/2014 10:07:32 AM with a score of 0
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