Player Comments on Puppet without strings

Really cool story idea. I enjoyed it a lot, even if the grammar was a little bad. I'm guessing English is your second language, so well done.

Your storyline is really well thought out and awesome. Your execution is poor because the writing is incoherent. You're missing words and your grammar is terrible. Is English your second language? If so, this is an absolutely awesome story. I gave it a 5 because I really love the storyline. Just as a side note, I don't think this is long enough to warrant splitting it off into a sequel. Generally, as a rule of thumb, a story should be about 200 pages long before that's even thought of.

I really liked the concept and storyline. My main complaint would be general mistakes in grammar and writing style. Still, I had fun reading this story and I hope you make other parts to it.

While the storygame itself was moderately interesting, I have to say that the grammatical errors and the lack of endlinks were slightly off-putting. 4/8

Erm what the frick is this hunk a junk? i litterrly hit all options but diead evertime! Youre luckyt im not reporting this to the big mans, Nnct time lets get it rigffhg! Otherwise we will brawl in fisticuffs!later chumps. Billy out!! <3

I really enjoy the premise to your story, and it's surprisingly well written for someone to whom English is a second language. Next time, you might consider working with someone else on the site who can edit it for you, to help make the story work as best as it can in English. Other than that, I just wish it was longer because I really enjoyed it but it was over too quick.

Overall, it had a few errors but I loved the story line.

7/8

Definitely a good story.

I want a sequel please. :D

I really liked it. Has a nice plot and storyline looking foward to next installment. Spelling was a bit off but not horribly.

Twas good but it needs some corrections in the grammar.

Loved the story. 6/8

Okay, but I would like a sequel.

I died with honor!

make a sequel

I couldn't understand it at all. It seemed like a good story but I was so confused. Need to write better english.

Amazing plot. The writing was a bit off, but overall great job.

i was confused half the time and you had a few mispelled words.