Player Comments on Search for Haven

Actual Dog Shit, besides the name of Furry Fox, and the singular method of the story. The shortness and just absolute trashiness, and grammar issues, also no use of items. This game sucks.

This is more like rushing through the skeleton of a plot than it is playing a game. There are, at least, a couple distinct plot lines. About the only real choice in the game comes halfway in, when you choose either to ignore or take the advice of a comrade. Either way, the big bad will eventually awake to fight, but your choice here determines whether or not you have a chance to win.

This game could be pretty good if it was better developed. It has the set up for a decent puzzle maze for the first half, although in this version, one never gets lost and you are just told what you find/do instead of getting some agency in it. There is the potential for a brief quest in the middle, although in this game the discovery is summed up in one sentence. Then the latter third could be the epic fight scene.

Unfortunately, none of these things are realized well in the plot. There are hints at a possible story and a larger world of dwarves and lore, but nothing fleshed out.

Correct punctuation would also be nice. Commas exist for a reason.

Short but well written. Make it longer and you’d have a good chance at something cool. Thanks for the point though. Much appreciated.

Nothing wrong with the basic plot, but this is like a bare bones summary of it rather than a story itself. Most pages are just a sentence or two, and 500 words total? Usually you want to spend more than a half an hour on these, even if it's not for a grade.

So, uh, I think I'm gonna go ahead and preemptively declare this the worst of the bunch from these class projects. You fail. No vixen will ever respond to your "yiffing", no matter how many times that word appears in your search history. You will never father any cubs and you will not survive the winter.