Player Comments on Stone Age

wasted potential

All the paths, and it took me ten minutes. Wow. A good idea, but it went wrong.

All the paths, and it took me ten minutes. Wow. A good idea, but it went wrong.

All the paths, and it took me ten minutes. Wow. A good idea, but it went wrong.

Too short.

That was quick or what.

didn't care for it, 3/8

Not bad, but I died for adjusting a raft or something. this phone sucks. 5/8

you spent a good amount of time on this, but some spelling mistakes. good first story.

loved the story........great job!

- you let me test drive your stories. Message me when the next one comes out :)

There are a few areas that you can improve upon. I'll state them from greatest to least problematic. There wasn't much of a plot. This was more like a linear progression of events than a story. Good plots are like trees instead of a blade of grass. There are many divisions from trunk to branch, and to twig. At the end of some of these twigs are delicious fruits (good endings) and some are barren (bad endings) Each descision takes that linear plot and changes it a little bit. Enough to make things different each walkthough, but simmular enough to make it part of the same story. As for the content people prefer to read pages over a paragraph. Your perspective and introduction were a little bit off. I recomend reading 3-5 star stories on here to get the gist of what people actuially want. You can also throw around ideas for story's with other users by using the post system. I'd love it if y

This was my first story so please dont put harsh comments on here! Tell me if you liked it! I know it was short, but I had learned about the stone age and I wanted to contribute a fun little game about it. All of the information about it is true. Cro-Magnon really do make tools, and by the Neolithic age, they were able to polish their tools. Thanks for playng!!!