Player Comments on Dinnertime for Contessa
This is nice little story. I appreciate the options with different paths for the story, even if they did loop around. The story could have had a little more description: for example, on the first page instead of putting an info dump there, perhaps it could have been more of an exploration that would reveal all those details without simply saying them. That would make the story much more interesting and would add a good bit of length to the story as well.
There were good options that led to different story experiences which is really good, especially in a story of this length. But again, in each case I think there could have been a little more detail in nearly every page to help describe and advance the story to make it even more interesting. The “dad” and “mom” terms were a little confusing, even if I was supposed to be a cat, though. Nicely done, this is a neat story.
on 7/22/2018 4:43:59 PM with a score of 0
Okay, this was cute.
Somehow I failed to see the tags and so it took me a little while to click to what the protagonist was. I was like damn, this girl is /lazy/.
At only a 2/8 in length this definitely could've been padded out a little more. More choices, some kind of conflict, maybe involving the aunt since she was specifically mentioned?
on 10/4/2016 7:24:23 PM with a score of 0
For a story on a site with the name "chooseyourstory.com" it's not exactly a story with a lot of choices. Nothing you do affects the ending, and it's not terribly exciting. But it was a cute little read-through with a nice twist. I enjoyed my time in it, but wouldn't choose to play again. It honestly wasn't a choose your own adventure at all.
-- Asteri on 1/29/2018 5:05:30 PM with a score of 0
This was kind of interesting but very short and had little in the way of a hook or description (right at the start I assumed you were a cat but this might have been intended as a twist for the end?)
on 10/21/2016 2:10:41 PM with a score of 0
I couldn't find any grammar mistakes, which is good. It was slightly boring. But keep up the good work!
on 10/5/2016 6:50:14 PM with a score of 0
Well that was cute. I liked the twist. But it definitely could have been longer and more variety of choices. I didn't notice any spelling or grammar mistakes. Not bad for a first time. Keep at it and next time try and add more options to expand on your story.
on 10/5/2016 8:22:47 AM with a score of 0
Not bad, but a little bit too short, and not so much to choose from.
Anyway, for the first time, it`s quite good.
on 10/5/2016 2:09:33 AM with a score of 0
The decisions lacked actual importance, there was only one ending, but I feel like you could expand upon the initial concept (like something of surviving you horrible aunt's visit).
on 10/4/2016 6:56:10 PM with a score of 0