Player Comments on Forgotten Magician

As others have mentioned, the grammar on this one is a definite problem. The story itself was not too bad, a little cliche at times, but overall a fun CYOA. It had a few interesting paths, especially for the better endings.

Um well, the path leading to the perfect ending was mildly interesting I guess, but the grammar in the story could be improved. By which I mean it was almost incomprehensible. Make sure you use good word processing software that will alert you to faulty grammar. Better luck next time!

This looks like it was written in a foreign language and translated into English using an online translator. The result is words that are strung together in an incomprehensible manner. After a few pages of this, I clicked around desperately looking for the end game link.

I am not 100% sure what I just did, but I "Direct the log to the rock the erect upward bet that I would fly to safety." Since I was naked at the time, I think it was something pretty perverted.

I also sweat from out of my eyes, and was keenly aware of how far away things were to the centimeter.

I'm so confused.

Hey! Good try, but you might want to go over... ahem... everything again with some sort of spell check or similar device that will allow you to say what you’d like to say better. You got the title correct though, so 2/8 for you.