Player Comments on Kirthia: Foundations

The setting and plot is boring, and it ends way too soon as well.

I wasn't logged in when I made that comment, so I hope you don't mind me posting it twice.

This was a nice treat. Obviously it was a bit shorter than I would like, but that doesn't take away too terribly much.

Of the entries I've read thus far, this is the one I've had the least problems with. Not any problems that I can think of at all, aside from length, and that criticism is barely one at all seeing as how you: were also trying to meet your six stories deadline, and how this was a contest entry. It also eases my mind knowing that you'll be adding around triple the content to this.

All in all, a good contest entry.

So in the end the Kirthia are able to achieve space travel and settle on other planets?

Very enjoyable! Did you do the cover art yourself? I have to say, you have a very interesting art style! I'd love to see that in some form of animated television series, but, alas, 'tis only a dream.

Anyways, good story. It's a bit too open, as in, not much of a concrete plot, but it's clear you weren't intending to write a story-focused CYOA but instead more of a choice-focused CYOA, as many authors seem to prefer.

Very well written, I enjoyed the balance of narrative pace and detailed description.
To be honest, I think it could have done with fewer "foreign" words, because while they can be utilised to great comical effect, they can also disrupt the narrative flow in places.