Player Comments on Nick the Computer Guy
It is interesting that you wrote this story for your Dad. I hope he liked it – though I do notice that the author apparently showed up on the site, quickly wrote the story before Christmas, then never came back! And they never logged in after 12/24, so I hope Dad actually got to read the story!
I do appreciate choices and options, after all, that’s what a CYS should be. But when the options all force you back to the main story by simply telling you that you made the wrong choice, that’s not really much of a choice, is it? You can create false choices that lead around and back to the main story, and that can be done effectively – but it can’t be done by simply telling the reader to go back and choose the other option.
The story overall was a little interesting and could have been even more interesting if the different options actually led to different paths and different endings. The writing is good and the descriptions are good, too. The story has lots of potential, but what if there was an ending where the squid wins? What if there is an ending where you get stuck working for the squid, or even work for it voluntarily? Overall pretty good, I hope Dad liked the story, thanks for sharing it with the site.
on 7/10/2018 4:30:21 PM with a score of 0
In a good way!
I liked it, not gonna lie ,but .... it was kinda short.
-- Crazypro1170 on 10/17/2019 10:31:54 AM with a score of 0
This was a random story. It was good though.
on 6/4/2018 10:27:43 AM with a score of 0
well written, But I did spend about five minutes going in circles. You may want to fix that.
on 12/7/2015 11:16:50 PM with a score of 0
I just guessed the code for the end
on 11/9/2015 5:31:30 PM with a score of 0
This was cool. And interesting. And interestingly cool.
-- Matthew on 10/16/2015 4:17:33 PM with a score of 0
-- Nick the computer guy on 4/18/2015 8:47:27 AM with a score of 0
Very good! It was fun throughout and I liked it a lot. It was a full on Choose Your Own Adventure Game! Some parts didn't make sense but overall, it is GREAT!
-- Klanex on 3/3/2015 9:24:10 PM with a score of 0
That was cute. Good game. I'm sure your dad will love it.
on 12/31/2014 3:21:26 PM with a score of 0
Very random, which is awesome. I really enjoyed this story and I'm sure your dad loved it. Merry Christmas! 8/8
on 12/25/2014 4:08:41 PM with a score of 0
This was okay. Some stuff didn't make sense, but nothing that took away from the story. And this kind of reminds me of the Stanley Parable, which is one of my favorite video games of all time. 4/8
on 12/24/2014 3:41:43 PM with a score of 0
It was good, but when someone talks it gets it's own paragraph.
on 12/24/2014 11:59:59 AM with a score of 0
Too short. just like this review.
-- connor on 12/24/2014 11:25:41 AM with a score of 0