Player Comments on Some Sort of Weird Story About a Zombie Happening

It's not terrible for a first storygame, you're testing branching and all. Each path is short but there are many of them, so the final impression is that of a complete (if short and unassuming) work. The funny nonsensical style didn't really border on annoying like I feared it would, so that's another plus. Of course you'll need to show more effort with your second story, since you seem capable of writing something more elaborate.

As for the technical side of things, I didn't notice many errors (only minor typos like 'loose' instead of 'lose' and 'hates' instead of 'hats'). The spacing between paragraphs seemed excessive at times, but you probably wanted to fill the page instead of having a measly five-liner at the top. One thing you could have done is add in some ways to lose the game, it would have made the CYOA more fun and it didn't require any additional effort.

Cool concept, I liked the humour.

Holy shit, this sucked.

whaa???

zombie blender????

drinking zombies?????