undr, The Wordsmith

Member Since

10/11/2017

Last Activity

2/20/2019 8:54 AM

EXP Points

326

Post Count

284

Storygame Count

0

Duel Stats

1 win / 1 loss

Order

Warden

Commendations

26

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

What the title says.

 

Trophies Earned

Earning 100 Points

Recent Posts

The Dark Room on 2/20/2019 8:49:58 AM

*Sighs*

THERE'S NO PLACE LIKE COG!


Hello. on 2/19/2019 4:50:28 PM

Fixed by reading this one in monotone again.


Hello. on 2/19/2019 4:31:03 PM

Welcome! I'd suggest taking a look at the articles in the Help & Info section for starters. If you have any questions, feel free to ask here on the forums.


The Dark Room on 2/19/2019 4:26:29 PM

"There's no place like CoG!!"


The Dark Room on 2/18/2019 5:31:14 AM

A cruel ending for me. I obviously don't want to visit CoG, but refusing would make me die either way. I suppose there's no "undo" option, right?

*grits teeth, clicks heels and mutters, "tHeRe'S nO pLaCe LiKe CoG"*


Ally on 2/16/2019 8:57:58 AM

This is certainly something you could use; combat isn't that easy to write and it's usually either too straightforward and dull or overcomplicated and confusing to read. This time you managed to give a clear description while also listing a variety of moves. I don't know if the dynamic of the fight is 100% technically correct but it felt realistic enough to not make me question it. I also liked that the scarred assassin scoffed at their technique, it added to the realism of the scene.

As for the rest, I don't know if I'd choose an assassin to be my bodyguard; that's a detail that you figure out later if you add this to a story though. I also found the other assassins to be a bit retarded when they kept referring to him as "my prince" but it's not that annoying, you probably just wanted to make the dynamic extra clear for the reader.


The Dark Room on 2/16/2019 8:31:42 AM

C. Click Heels Together


The Dark Room on 2/15/2019 10:43:59 AM

C. Steal Their Stuff


The Dark Room on 2/14/2019 4:52:15 PM

A. Abandon Hope


The Dark Room on 2/12/2019 7:05:55 AM

Lol thanks