ShoujoAddict, The Wordsmith
Hi there, assuming you've come to see this profile implies you would want to know something about me. Well I'm your regular loquacious, nerdy, science loving, anime addicted, college going person. I like reading, poetry and writing a lot so expect some works from me...(if I ever finish them that is.)
A quatrain fills a little space,
Although it’s pretty small,
And often times, as in this case,
It has no point at all.
Some quotes that sound good to me:
"If you don't have time to read, you don't have time to write."
"Write without fear, edit without mercy."
"If I waited for perfection I would never write a word."
“I define science fiction as the art of the possible. Fantasy is the art of the impossible”
"Nothing in this world exists except atoms and empty space; everything else is just specualtion."
"May you live all the days of your life."
"Love is a serious mental disease."
"All that we see and seem is just a dream within a dream."
-Edgar Allan Po
"Everything that lives is designed to end. We are perpetually trapped in a never-ending spiral of life and death. Is this a curse? Or some kind of punishment? I often think about the god who blessed us with this cryptic puzzle...and wonder if we'll ever get the chance to kill him."
-2B, Nier Automata.
"If you want to live a happy life tie it to a goal not to people or things."
Who will believe my verse in time to come,
If it were fill’d with your most high deserts?
Though yet, heaven knows, it is but as a tomb
Which hides your life and shows not half your parts.
If I could write the beauty of your eyes
And in fresh numbers number all your graces,
The age to come would say “This poet lies;
Such heavenly touches ne’er touch’d earthly faces.”
So should my papers, yellowed with their age,
Be scorn’d like old men of less truth than tongue,
And your true rights be term’d a poet’s rage
And stretched metre of an antique song:
But were some child of yours alive that time,
You should live twice, in it and in my rhyme.
The trees are in their autumn beauty,
The forest paths are dry,
Under the October twilight a water,
Mirrors the still sky.
Charles IV, king of Bohemia and holy roman emperor was considered one of the most influential and successful rulers of his time. However, not all of his decisions were wise...
Special thanks to mazardark for his advice on historical combat, and to cricket for beta reading.
Also, this is an entry to Corgi's unofficial contest of the lords and my first story on the site.
This fan fiction is based on 'Kimi Ni Todoke' a manga series. If you don't want your experience with the manga to be spoiled then please do not read this.
To any fellow otaku fans out there I apologize if I'm not able to give you the level of depth you experience from the actual manga(since I'm nowhere near the level of Karuho Shiina)but nevertheless I hope you like this.
To all other readers, well if you know about the series it certainly would help to better grasp and "feel" the story, but if you don't want to go through the painstaking effort of reading scans from the net (and ruining your laptop with viruses) then you can treat this as an individual story too; that being said I highly recommend you read the series later though.
Hope you enjoy!
Recent PostsBurpents Bountiful Ballad on 12/5/2019 11:35:57 AM
Ah ballads. I love how flexible the meter in these tend to become, as is also evident by yours serpent. First stanza follows iambic meter, second kind of a dactyl, third Pyrrhic and spondee and so on and so forth. Now some might not like that each stanza sounds unique, but I for one like it. Intentionally or not, you've managed to use meter in order to increase the tempo of your story. Like, if you wanted to bring more action, you used a meter with more stressed syllables. If you wanted to create a mixed tempo, you used a meter with more unstressed syllables. Keep in mind when you're writing your next ballad to match the right meter with the right tempo. Nobody wants to read stressed meter when someone is sleeping, but you've more or less got the essential part of a ballad down; that is matching meter with context.
Now, even though the attempt at creating different metered stanzas was nice, a few lines in these stanzas don't properly follow the meter. Nothing major, but it very slightly sounds awkward. I noticed most of the ending lines of the stanzas go a bit haywire with respect to the stanza's meter. This is fine if you want to intentionally add more emphasis, in fact that is a good method; but I don't think that was your intention.
Your choice in figures of speech felt...unique. Stuff like "oh wait, there's a catch," and repeating the same meaning again in the next line, etc. I'm not saying its bad, every poet has their own signature style, so maybe these as your own unique style. Still, always try and add flair to your poem.
Coming to the context, I do get the feeling of epicness from this ballad, which I think was your aim so good job on that. If you would've refined the meter a bit more, and used more "epic" sounding figures of speech, that would've been better, but overall a really good attempt for a first-timer.
Also, ballads were originally meant to be poetry-song hybrids danced to at a ball, so if you want to be more contemporary and traditional try adding refrains and a song like rhythm, similar to what one does in villanelles. This modern method of ballads is fine too, though. I just have a personal preference of following the 'old ways' of poetry.
Shouja's poetry compilation thread on 12/5/2019 8:42:42 AM
Yes, I wasn't really paying attention to the lines in 'who am I?' Just wanted to get forth my ideas, but I want to try and rewrite it properly now with the same theme. Thanks, I'll go through the poems of Walt Whitman then, really love these philosophical type of poems
Aw man, I completely messed up the meaning of schizophrenia! I thought it was a synonym for disassociative personality disorder.
Anyway, thank you for reading everything :)
Noob Census - Earn pointless points! on 12/4/2019 1:58:34 AM
Nah got a story game more than 4 lol
Noob Census - Earn pointless points! on 12/4/2019 1:57:19 AM
Noob Census - Earn pointless points! on 12/4/2019 12:42:36 AM
I think you have a story game rated more than 4, if I remember correctly.
Noob Census - Earn pointless points! on 12/4/2019 12:38:16 AM
Had made some sort of puzzle story game, and was kinda active before.
Noob Census - Earn pointless points! on 12/3/2019 4:09:54 PM
Ah that was a joke.
Noob Census - Earn pointless points! on 12/3/2019 3:42:06 PM
Nah, a pretty good writer, nice dude overall. Been around here way before than Kar.
Noob Census - Earn pointless points! on 12/3/2019 3:37:39 PM
Steve is a weird, green coloured rattlesnake who was found many years ago as merely an egg on Mizal's garden field. Oddly enough, when he hatched he hatched he spoke, and loved to annoy Mizal to a huge extent. He even came very close to getting his head cut off during one of Mizal's regular 'snake purges' that she does on her ranch.
Nowadays, he just hangs around southern Ireland tarmacing roads, selling authentically synthetic four leaf clovers, and his own 'home bred' leprechauns to eager tourists.
The Smallest Servants - Squirrels and the Ramayana on 11/27/2019 3:34:49 AM
Ahahaha, I used to call shekrus "little rainbows" for a reason. But believe me, they're mean as fuck, don't fall for the cute colour.