MrAce321, The Reader

Member Since

11/19/2020

Last Activity

3/18/2024 11:53 PM

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Post Count

387

Storygame Count

2

Duel Stats

19 wins / 8 losses

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Hey, I'm Ace. To do list: Escape triple shame Done: 7/5/22 Complete 25 well thought out reviews Progress: 15 Write a story with a rating above 5 Here is where I keep track of the stories I've reviewed. If I reviewed your story and you're curious as to the rating I gave it it's on there. Reviews

Storygames

A City Lost

This is a story about an artificer making his way through the world. Making choices who shape who he is and who he will become. With even his motives shifting based on his choices.

Authors Note:

This is an entry for EndMaster's prompt contest.

The prompt was, "This story’s protagonist is an artificer, magical blacksmith, or creator of magical weapons. You can translate this prompt to a sci-fi equivalent if you want."

I managed to make this story into a complete product with all the content I wanted in the time given, but I didn't have time to polish the prose much. Please leave any feedback you have. And just for fun make sure to include which of the nine epilogues you got or your favorite if you read multiple.


Bound by Light

This story is about a paladin who is on a quest to investigate an unkown evil out west, joined by a lighthearted mercanary.

Authors note: This story was made in a few days for Corgi's Lords of the land 2 contest. Not really proud of it, but it is what it is. Please leave any feedback you have in the reviews because while I know time could've improved the prose, the plot seems to be lacking something that I'm not sure of.


A Tale of Freedom and Chains
unpublished

Crime PG story
unpublished
dcas

Placeholder for story about PG
unpublished

No


The Candy Man
unpublished
paper slingers but with kids selling candy in boarding school

Recent Posts

Travelling for Inspiration looking for advices! on 3/18/2024 8:08:50 AM
I'm actually traveling to Chicago today, wondering if that might be inspirational. I might just get shot tho.

feels good on 3/17/2024 12:05:18 PM
Only the best

End Master’s Prompt Contest 3 on 3/15/2024 10:17:44 AM
i wrote this like 20 minutes after waking up lol. It's better when I'm at my pc instead of my laptop. Though I did look up the spelling of "grandiose" lmao.

End Master’s Prompt Contest 3 on 3/15/2024 9:50:37 AM
Where I'm at with my story: I'm at around 14k words, and I've almost written the "cannon" path. But this story is grandiose in scale, so it needs a lot more work. I could cut down the story, making it more linear and stuff. But I actually really like it, and want to finish it in its entirety. If that was all I wouldn't be struggling, but the biggest problem is while I have the big ideas down, the story isn't good. There are the big moments that I'd want to happen, but the rest of the plot I'm not happy with. A lot of details that don't make sense that I put to just move the story along. And that's without mentioning the writting quality itself, which is awful. I feel like I'd need 1000 years to make it readable and not some cringe fanfiction (it's not a fanfiction, I just mean in terms of quality.) But either way, that's where I'm at. I'm trying to finish it in it's entirety without cutting it down and at the same time trying to not cringe everytime I read something from it. This is the first thing I've worked on of this scale, which might be like 30k or so. I would just submitt it anyway and call it a day, I'm not afarid of bad stories, but I don't want to publish this story like this, because I think it has potential. Not really sure. My spring break is this upcoming week, hopefully I can get a lot done over that. Maybe I should abandon this story for this contest and write something else.

feels good on 3/12/2024 10:39:22 AM
@MizalbutCapitalized rolling in his grave rn

Any Greek Mythology based games? on 2/29/2024 3:54:43 PM
If I recall, I believe this one is greek based. https://chooseyourstory.com/story/soul-thief Really good story.

Endmaster's prompt contest writing thread. on 2/27/2024 8:36:01 PM
kys

Endmaster's prompt contest writing thread. on 2/27/2024 8:35:34 PM
Thanks, that answers my second question. I thought it was strange to start the sentence in the second quotation capitalized when there was no period, but just assumed that's how it worked. That first one is just super wrong though. I thought that period since you didn't turn the question mark into a comma it meant you had to capitalize the tag.

Endmaster's prompt contest writing thread. on 2/27/2024 8:32:33 PM
damn, might need to turn rich text editor for that red underline.

Endmaster's prompt contest writing thread. on 2/27/2024 7:23:59 PM
Just reached 10k, slow progress these last few weeks, and just learned that some of precieved notions about dialouge grammar were wrong! Thanks Gower... I thought that question and exclamation marks went like this "Why is Ace so retarded?" You ask. Instead of this "Why is Ace so retarded?" you ask. I also thought that joining sentences work like this "That's a complicated question," I answer, "Something to do with the brick wall he ran into." Instead of this "That's a complicated question," I answer. "Something to do with the brick wall he ran into." I swear to god I saw these somewhere at some point. I have no idea where I got this idea from. But I've been following these rules consistently for my entire life up until this point. E: Maybe I got the 2ed thing from this? I think this is correct grammar? "I hate my life," I start, "and everything that comes with it."