Gower, The Expert Scrivener

Member Since

3/31/2019

Last Activity

1/22/2020 2:25 PM

EXP Points

2,520

Post Count

920

Storygame Count

4

Duel Stats

0 wins / 0 losses

Order

Notorious Marauder Exemplar

Commendations

362

"He was slightly less unfun."

 

 

 

"Somehow there was comfort in coffee despite his misery; the only comfort in a black world." -- Hornblower in the West Indies

Trophies Earned

Earning 100 Points Earning 500 Points Earning 1,000 Points Earning 2,000 Points Having 3 Storygame(s) Featured Rated 99.0% of all Stories Given by BerkaZerka on 12/14/2019 - For an inspiring display of creativity ^v^ Given by EndMaster on 01/07/2020 - You may be fooling the rest, but I know you’re up to no good. Given by mizal on 10/11/2019 - For your exceptional games and articles, many forum contributions, and disturbing sweetness and light. (Sorry about McAllen, it wasn’t our idea either.) Given by Will11 on 10/12/2019 - For your excellent stories and many worthwhile contributions to the site :)

Storygames

Featured Story Kelly Unicornstrider and Friends (1982-1985) Super Quiz

A comprehensive quiz + bonus fan faction about the the underrated cult classic show "Kelly Unicornstrider and Friends" (1982-1985). Questions range from really easy to really difficult.


Featured Story Private Game for Natalie

I think putting this on "publish" makes it so only we can see this. It's just for us, sweetie. I made it to celebrate our anniversary and remember some special intimate moments together over the years in an interesting way as a present for you.

I hope you love it, Natalie, as much as I love you!

(Of course if there's any admin looking at this, or if I messed up, don't read this, because it's got private things in it.)


Featured Story Sabbatical Report Presentation

This is my required report to the full faculty in accordance with the rules noted in the Faculty Handbook (version 15.1, as of October 2017)


Sixteen Words

"Personally I can only read 16 words in one go before words stop working," wrote Mizal.

 

This game has sixteen words per path.  Not counting "The End."  So you can play quickly.

 

When reviewing, please use precisely sixteen words.   That should be plenty for your suggestions and observations.

 

Note this challenge connected with this game:  Write the Last Page!


Articles Written

Basic Sentence Structure: Additive Sentences
Comma Use and Additive Sentences with lots of examples

Cumulative Sentences, Part 1
An introduction to the sophisticated and elegant cumulative sentence style.

Dialogue Punctuation
This is a brief discussion of how to punctuate dialogue in US and UK English. It also notes a few rules for quotation mark use in general.

Relative Sentences
A lecture on how to write relative sentences using restrictive and non-restrictive clauses.

Semicolons and Advanced Additive Sentences
This article explains how to use semicolons to create new types of additive sentences. It includes the plain semicolon and semicolons with transition words.

Understanding Style: The Sweet Style
An introduction to style, focusing on "sweet" style. How to recognize it, when to use it, and when to avoid it.

Recent Posts

How did you spend MLK day? on 1/20/2020 9:53:29 PM

I ate at Bon Me with my wife, bought double-sided tape at CVS, dropped my kid off at a play date, and then saw a movie. 

Then I prepared for the start of the new semester tomorrow.


Hi! Quick question... on 1/20/2020 8:34:38 PM

He's probably just upset because you didn't give him the usual greeting of "@"ing him.

(You know, like @Serage) But traditionally, one does that to Endmaster three times in a row when you're a noob on the forum to say hi.


IWT 13: The Resurrection on 1/20/2020 9:50:13 AM

Remember that alcoholic vampires can only get drunk by feasting on the blood of victim who are themselves drunk.


Hi! Quick question... on 1/19/2020 4:09:41 PM

That's a fun idea.  But you will want to wait and gather some site cred before trying to run a contest.  I recommend reading and rating lots of stories, leaving comments, and participating in the Best of 2019 judging that is going on right now.  You won't get any traction trying to start a contest your first day on the site.


Hi! Quick question... on 1/19/2020 3:59:37 PM

What's the idea?


MRROOOW! *hiss* *spit* on 1/15/2020 8:34:23 PM

Look, Chris, I'm sorry I only gave you a 7 there.  This is kind of embarrassing out in public here.


Hello. I'm new. on 1/12/2020 8:02:27 PM

Hi, and welcome!

Advice:  get a profile picture; read a bunch of stories and rare and write comments on them to get a sense of the many styles here (try the featured games right on the first page of the storygames section); read the forums for a bit to get a sense of the style of posting; ask any questions at all—someone will help you.


Legacy on 1/12/2020 4:20:32 AM

It isn't really long-winded so much as not using any punctuation.  I would start with commas.  Check out the articles on this site to get you started.

This is a good one to start with:  https://chooseyourstory.com/help/articles/article.aspx?ArticleId=4315


Gower's Office Hours on 1/12/2020 4:16:22 AM

"Only to" there probably could have the comma, looking at it again, although I wouldn't insist on it, and obviously my first inclination wasn't to use it.  There is no grammatical requirement for it in that position.

it would be useful, though, to prevent someone thinking that "only" there meant "for the sole purpose of."


Gower's Office Hours on 1/11/2020 7:34:10 PM

This is an interesting one that I would expound on more if I were at my computer at the moment, but in short, you are right—that is  an infinitive "to" rather than a preposition.  

 

What you have there is a "purposive" infinitive phrase (aka, you can imagine it going "in order to..."). And those indeed do not get the comma.

 

"Had they injected your heart with cocaine to try to get you going?"

 

This is as opposed to a "result" phrase that indicates the result, which does get the comma.

 

"They injected her heart with cocaine only to learn that she was already dead."