Player Comments on Where the HELL am I???? : Chapter Three

I thought this was an improvement from the previous installment, in terms of both writing and content, although it is still extremely linear. It kind of works for the story though, since the inevitability of it all seems to reinforce the bleak mood of the story, but if you like seeing different possibilities play out, then this may not be the game for you.
-- the_quiller on 2/26/2016 3:04:10 AM
Nice read, and this one seems to have more choices than previous storygames in this series. It does still feel linear, although that's to be expected when this is a series.

I agree with Katie and think that this series should just be one big storygame. Other than being able to release chapters bit by bit, I don't see any advantages to making this one a story. It feels like each storygame doesn't have enough closure for it to be a standalone game.

Looking forward to chapter four.
-- 31TeV on 9/24/2014 9:50:49 AM
I’m intrigued to see what happens next! Please post the next part!
-- Mi00 on 7/7/2019 2:39:16 AM
uh what happened the fights could have been longer there could have been better options i'm like i know you can do better come on now
-- j3 on 5/6/2019 1:19:23 PM

A couple more comments on your story.

Suddenly the other door opens and a small, Asian girl, around the age of ten enters the ring frighten.
Should that be "enters the ring looking frightened." ?

He looks a bit concern.
Should that be "He looks a bit concerned." ?

Then in a blink of the eye he's gone.
Commonly that phrase is "in the blink of an eye".

Finally a door opens and hell hound are send in to rip you both to pieces.
That should be either "a hell hound" or "hell hounds".

You decide that he's had enough f your cruelty and so you kill him.
Just a typo here: "of your cruelty"

Hope this helps! Keep up the good work. I haven't written anything yet.

-- David on 5/3/2019 4:27:50 PM
I thought this sentence was awkward:

"What did you think you were traded in for to be?"

I started with chapter 3, so maybe I missed something in earlier chapters.

Maybe "Why else do you think you were traded in?"
-- David on 5/3/2019 4:10:12 PM
This was very enjoyable.
-- Faervel on 2/17/2019 4:19:51 PM
Can't wait to start Chapter 4!!!
-- blackcigarette on 12/13/2017 5:38:42 PM
Much much better so far. I saw from your profile that you haven't been on in years but if you come back keep writing. You also should just string these stories all into one.
-- corgi213 on 10/9/2017 8:41:25 PM
Getting better than the first two. Interesting.
-- crazygurl on 6/19/2017 3:38:40 PM
-- magicchess29 on 11/24/2016 1:24:22 AM
Still getting better.
-- BigRonn77 on 9/7/2016 4:13:53 PM
I like this one because I got to kill people over and over again, but still I think the options are obvious surrender and you die, fight and you live not hard.
-- hayesa on 7/14/2015 1:52:52 PM
-- NightmareBonnie on 5/13/2015 6:20:57 PM
Hurry up and get Chapter Four out!!!!!
-- myawfod on 11/9/2014 12:27:58 AM
It was a decent game, however having not played the previous titles in this series I wan't really sure what was happening. Perhaps try adding a recap page to explain how we get to the start of this story.
-- Jordi P on 10/22/2014 12:56:22 PM
Great story! When you're finished the chapters, I would love to see them combined into one large story!
-- insanebutvain on 9/8/2014 6:40:26 AM
If you combined all the chapters into one story, I have no doubt it would be a top rated story game. 5/5
-- Aramis on 8/27/2014 8:09:01 AM
Good Hell Game
-- Walker on 7/10/2014 10:24:31 PM
This is the first decent newer storygame I've seen in a while. Keep it up!
-- karod1blockbreaker on 6/1/2014 7:45:25 AM
I'm enjoying this as a series! A good balance of difficulty.
-- bilbo on 6/1/2014 12:09:18 AM
Love this series. Keep going!
-- Anonymous on 5/28/2014 6:09:07 AM
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