Player Comments on Your Country your choice

This was bad ummm the story wasn't finished some links didn't work

This isn't awful by any means, but it could definitely use a lot of work.

Great game. If you finish the other storylines, then I'll consider rating this 8 out of 8.

7/8

I liked the prospect of it, but it didn't turn out the way I thought it would. The pages were super short and didn't leave much for actual decisions. It was less of making a country and more of hearing that things happened, there was almost no detail.

Each page is extremely short, and you need to do some serious proofreading.
Also everything seemed to result in the traitors ending.

Although the concept of your game is interesting, the game itself needs improvement. Some of the choices were just random, without any hint of why you should choose them or what they will do. Your spelling also needs some improvement and it might be a good idea to add punctuations to your story ;)But don't give up, this has the potential to become a great game.

Good:
1. Creativity of situations and consequences of choices
2. Nonlinearity
3. Transitions between years

Bad:
1. Lack of commas and other critical punctuation
2. There was at least one link that didn't lead to another page

Ugly:
1. Apparent author laziness in proofreading- the author should proofread the story, not the readers
2. 5 days? Most good stories took months of planning and writing (JJJ is an exception)

I definitely would be interested in a full improved version, but the reception won't be much better unless the amount of effort put into it increases dramatically.

I liked this story, good job. It was short and simple but pretty enjoyable. I will defiantly read the other story branches provided you put them up.

I though it was an interesting concept - I'd read the other paths if you write them.