Player Comments on Capture the Flag
I’ll begin with a disclaimer: I’m not a professional writer by any means, nor am I a seasoned reviewer, so do conduct your own research and bear in mind that not everything here may be correct. As for potential readers, beware of spoilers galore.
The humorous beginning takes a simple issue— regarding sitting plans in a cafeteria— and dramatizes it tenfold. With just a few lines of dialogue, the author manages to paint a picture of the different players and the setting. While I did initially agree with Future1 in regards to providing some information about the two characters we’ll have to choose from, reading back a second time, I notice the subtle foreshadowing that I missed on my previous playthrough. To state it plainly, we are given information on Corey’s ability to sneak up on people from the first page alone.
Since I’m not the most familiar with ‘capture the flag’, I appreciate the instructions at the start. The cave-of-time format really adds replayability. Another thing I like is that information is added in between dialogue and actions, preventing info-dumps from occurring, while still filling readers in on important details. The narrator’s personality shines through the story too.
One suggestion I might make would be to provide readers with more insight as to which choices are better to make. Lots of choices do make sense, of course, so this is only a minor issue. For instance, I chose a certain choice because it would give me a much better chance of escaping if I got caught. The next thing I know, whichever choice I picked, I didn’t escape. Still, the ending was reasonable and believable, so that’s just a nitpick. Or perhaps it’s a thematic decision to comment on the spontaneity of ‘capture the flag’ games.
This storygame incorporates suspense very well. In my opinion, it not only raises the stakes, but makes every choice seem all the more impactful. Combined with the cave-of-time structure, it makes for an entertaining and intriguing read. The mundane conversations are juxtaposed against the more dramatic action scenes. It adds breathing room between the tension-filled moments, which is great.
Getting a winning ending is rewarding! The author immerses readers in this storygame, allowing us to make a lot of important choices. I enjoy storygames like this, where readers’ opinions matter and we aren’t pigeonholed into picking a specific plot line without any variance in the storygame whatsoever. Even the losing endings are well-written and realistic. These motivate me to find the winning ones even more.
I’d also like to comment on how the main character and Alexsis are rather similar in a number of ways, which makes their ‘battle’ quite interesting to watch. Both are confident, stubborn kids who are utterly convinced of the other’s untrustworthiness. Yet, they are still able to communicate amiably at times, kind of like how children are in real life. As this paragraph is about the characters, I’ll add that managing a large cast isn’t easy, but the author handles it well. Most characters that you interact with generally have consistent personalities throughout.
When I first clicked this storygame, I expected a simple game of ‘capture the flag’. This turned out to be a game of strategy, prose alight with anticipation, and a fun way to spend my time. Reading carefully and deciding what makes the most sense is rewarded, while simply clicking links at random is not likely to work. Great storygame overall! That’s even more of an accomplishment considering that it’s your first.
on 10/25/2021 8:42:55 AM with a score of 0
Simple and short, but you know, I liked it reasonably well. It met its intended goal, and had enough variety to make me want to play it several times to see if I could be better at this capture the flag than in real life.
on 9/17/2021 7:46:47 PM with a score of 0
it pretty fun
on 8/11/2021 10:23:33 PM with a score of 0
I thought it provided a good amount of excitement for what it was, and I liked the character development and the integration of the actual story. The only thing I thought could have been better was although I realize the character didn't know the other two characters, it would have been nice to get at least one peace of information about Cory and Harriet instead of just having to make a random choice.
— Future1 on 8/3/2021 9:11:33 PM with a score of 0