Player Comments on Escape School 2- Watergrove Academy

Not bad at all.

I must say that this was an improvement over the first game, as far as story presentation and overall flow go. This game actually captured my attention and held it for the duration of my multiple playthroughs, so hats off for creating something that was rather engaging and interesting to read.

Ah, but there was some rather problematic issues with the grammar of this storygame. The capitalization of sentences were inconsistent, and I can't stress enough the importance of tidying such things up so they're not able to be detrimental to the story that you're trying to tell your readers. Still, you do have potential when it comes to making fascinating narratives.

I enjoyed that this didn't feel quite linear, as there were multiple endings to earn that varied from favorable to not so favorable for the protagonist. Such things made me want to explore every possible ending that I could be gained out of curiosity. So not bad on that front, because I do feel that shows some imagination and effort from the writer.

All in all, you show promise as a writer, but I really do recommend that you learn to take your time with such things as grammar and making sure that your story has as little flaws as possible. At least when it comes to the technical side of things that is.

Overall, I think that this was some fine work.

There's some serious potential here! The plot is definitely better than your last game, and the pathes are nice and non-linear. However, your storytelling (including spelling and grammar) could use some serious work. My advice would be to spend a little bit more time working on those aspects. I can tell, due to the extremely short timespan between each one being made, that you must be rushing to churn these games out. Perhaps you could have someone read your next one(s) over and help correct mistakes?

Again, a pretty good game, but there's still a rather large amount of room for improvement.

Why can’t I get the perfect ending?!? I did it like 3 million times!!!

Easy and fun. nice job.

It's slightly better than the first game, and now there are less people trying to kill me, but it really needs a bit more than this.

it is unbelivebley short I love it but it needs to be a little bit longer

Well,that's it...

Cool story

Grammatical errors make it hard to read. Basically good storyline. A little too silly in naming some things.

Not bad. It was interesting and the over-all grammar was ok.

Good little story. Well written. Has potential to be expanded into something epic.

Certainly an interesting story, but I could've known at the beginning of the story I was to be set as a girl.

I was imagining my adolescent self (with a little beard) all the way until halfway through!

I luv this game! It's the best school game yet followed by the high school game.

pretty good... you should make another sequel, and make it a bit longer and more complex.

Really fun, somewhat abrupt at times but overall I enjoyed it.

OMG! Finally a choose your onw story has a girl as the main person! This is the only onw i know of.

good game.

Well written with a unique story. Kind of short, but I did enjoy trying to get the rest of the endings. :)

not bad was i scared not at all

The game was sort and I won on my first try. Good writing and I didn't post the comment below this. This game is better than your last

The first was better

It was a little bit better than your other game but not by much. First of all, you need to capitalize at the beginning of a new sentence. Secondly, things just felt a little weird and unrealistic at times.

Spoiler warning:

When the girl was brainwashed by the teachers Alice and you said not to tell anyone. Why? Shouldn't the both of us be worried? Also, the ending was really rushed. How did those girls get their hands on a teleportation device if they are only high school students?

End of spoilers

Please don't be mistaken: It wasn't as bad as I make it sound. You imporved in that there are more options and a better plot line. You seem to have listened to the comments of your previous story and made changes, which is good. My advice is that you try a little more and work a little longer on the your games.

4/8

Kinda short, but still good

Better then your first one. Don't like choices which are just luck though.