Player Comments on Fairies at Snowbell's School

I sorry you all feel like this show this fomour Stafford College teacher give me A* on it

This was damn near incomprehensible.

Um, this is complicated to understand. Please fix the spelling and grammar.

Wow, this was...maybe one of the most nonsensical and incoherent things I've ever read?

You're definitely too young to be drinking, and you know, it's great that you had an idea for a story and all (even if you're taking ideas from another person, making this fanfiction...) but that means absolutely nothing if you can't be bothered to write it down in a way that makes sense.

I'd encourage you to take this down, but with the number of broken links I suppose it'll be taken down for you, soon enough.

Found many dead-end links, and the story was too wacky to follow. It's already been said, but it is highly reccommended, that you give this another go.

Good try, but next time, aim higher.

There's simply way too many glaringly obvious grammatical errors to rate this any higher than a 1/8.

I recommend unpublishing this and getting someone to at least beta read your work and point out what's wrong. There's no shortage of people here that wouldn't mind helping you out here.

Me being one of them. :x

Also um...I saw Hogwarts so shouldn't this go in fanfiction?
I could be wrong...I could barely follow this story so...

I.....think you put work in this but um...I understood barely anything.
Your grammar and spelling need um...some work...