Player Comments on Multiverse Theory

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(Besides that, it was actually pretty good. Overall, 4/8.)

Kind of touching, though I didn't really get all of that physics jargon. Uhh, and it was a little annoying that we had so many continue buttons of the previous already explored verses. Bit strange.

Liked the concept!
Most of the issues I had were with verb tense and phrasing. The text switched between past tense and present tense seemingly at random, and I feel that this story in particular needs thoughtful tense choice.
In addition, there were a few sentences that could have been phrased better. For example, "Aubba P's proceeding with mauling" could be better rewritten as "Aubba P's mauling" or even "The raccoons mauled Aubba P."
I like the tone change present when the POV switches from the cat to the scientist.
Overall, not a bad plot, and the mechanics used were cool, but the phrasing and tense needs work.

I like the effort, but keep in mind it has to be possible to end the game and leave comments or the game wouldn't be possible to rate and comment. There's a scripting bug where the continue links just accumulate as you exhaust all the possible multiverse theories, and if you don't click all the unique ones, you won't get the ultimate ensemble theory -- you'll just see a page without options left. It'd be good to take the story down and fix that before continuing.

I give it a 3 so far. It's a very short linear story with extra steps, essentially. Keep writing, though!