12/17/2020

9/30/2023 2:55 PM

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2 wins / 5 losses

Sage

The Razing of Nipthm

You live a small farming life on Nipthm, a planet of scrublands and grasslands. Trouble heads your way, and it's bringing a mortal danger you can't avoid. United Space doesn't bother trying to protect the outer worlds. You're on your own.

This is a story for Endmaster's Manifest Destiny contest. It was made in such a short period of time I wouldn't have normally been allowed to publish it (2 days). Hopefully it's entertaining, and I didn't make too many errors. Enjoy!

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Howdy. I'm going to use this thread to test a recent change to the site. Picking on noob threads is a cherished pastime, after all. ~ posted 15 years ago from my iPhone

It's probably copying the image as a base-64 data URI or something. You'll know if you do that and post it to notepad++ or a similar text editor, and since we don't scrub HTML super duper well it works. I don't have Word to test if this is what's happening or not.

Back in Highschool, we had a required course on digital technology, which taught how to turn on a computer and send emails. It's not an awful idea, except you couldn't test out of it. They made it dumber at the end though when they tried to make people write websites for some reason. Kind of seems like two different levels of tech savvy right there.

Runner-up for most useless is math after like algebra 1. It should be elective, but we need to show up China or whatever. Most people get nothing out of it past the first "find X" problem. Art's good and important, but people who did art already drew long before art class and it's an oversaturated talent pool already, so just leave it elective. P.E. at least was keeping kids healthy sort of.

Story A did well trying to add dialog to the story, but its focus on just combat limited its appeal a bit. It also had words a bit too long, too often. "bantha fodder-eating", "three-sixty", etc. could be omitted or shortened for a smooth flow, which is really important to action scenes. I'd like to see what it'd look like with a smoother flow.

Story B had good framing of the scenes and a nice twist at the end. It managed a show-not-tell approach pretty well with the narration not getting in the way. The ending was good and overall I enjoyed this one.

Going with story B.

They used to have a "widgets" editor thing that'd let you have multiple things under My Stuff besides just storygames (which explains why "My Stuff" is so generic). But that was always broken anyway, so it was culled a few updates ago. This random button needs to join its compadres and take a dirt nap.

It seems to be working for me actually, maybe you're doing other steps that cause it to act different?

If it's going to be slow-cooked, it probably needs to be dinner. The fact that it's at the end of the day also makes it nice because there's no, or way less, garbage to keep track of as far as the daily schedule goes. YMMV if you're one of those weirdos who has kids (old enough that you can't just heap buttered noodles at them)

Pushed a few updates for 3/29.

Answered. Looking forward to how this all plays out.

this reply is more late than a fossil, but yep, storygame url titles are part of the unicode changes I was on. I'm keeping that one for myself until I finish it since I already did unicode for most of the forum part of the site.