12/17/2020

10/19/2021 3:50 PM

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Sage

The Razing of Nipthm

You live a small farming life on Nipthm, a planet of scrublands and grasslands. Trouble heads your way, and it's bringing a mortal danger you can't avoid. United Space doesn't bother trying to protect the outer worlds. You're on your own.

This is a story for Endmaster's Manifest Destiny contest. It was made in such a short period of time I wouldn't have normally been allowed to publish it (2 days). Hopefully it's entertaining, and I didn't make too many errors. Enjoy!

Scratch down a vote for Revengeance. I found it more entertaining, and the one about ghosts seemed to skim over details here and there (like dying in a few days of starvation at an orphanage to just come back as a ghost). It also had a bit of talkative side narration that I didn't like as much.

All in all, another easy win for the author, which is clearly femwolverine.

It's not as important to me. There's some other stuff I'll jump back into that would be a lot more useful to most people (dark mode, unicode support, fixing font sizes on mobile, etc.)

CYS boldly and nobly ignores case-sensitivity in passwords. The powers that be have decided to make a slight adjustment here and start respecting case sensitivity. Soonish. An error was never made in the infallible and glorious history of CYS; move along.

That's hilariously bad if true since that halves the difficulty to guess a password. Then again, only a few hundred people are active here and effectively nobody knows this place exists since it's so small.

I'll try to look at it later today to see.

If you want to leave it up to the reader, give the reasoning without the verdict. Instead of "you don't want to get caught in this mess," say something like "investigators are going to come, as they always do. Leaving fingerprints at the scene wouldn't bode well". The character has given their thoughts and the reader gets to decide. You can throw in doubts from all angles this way, too.

As an option, you can also omit the "you think" part to make thoughts seem more personal in second person. Sentences usually flow better that way, too.

Who, me? I'm just the silhouette in the background that moves when you look away. Don't worry about it.

Man I'm falling behind on the stories Ninja's putting out; haven't got to Blackbirds yet, either. I've got my reading cut out for me on this contest -- congrats to everyone that made it past the finish line!

Glory to all who submitted a story in this epic contest! Nothing but S H A M E to those who saw their destiny and let it go.

Finished this one! https://chooseyourstory.com/story/the-razing-of-nipthm

By the mocking laugh of a redcap! Cabagarth grumbles out a string of gnomish curses after sleeping through an entire round. Really should set aside a few days to have that demon exorcised from his blood. He takes a look around to see what everyone's working on this round. Seems they'res checking through their cooking ware. What the hell? Oh, but a few have weapons too. So it's a dual-themed round, then. He sets to work. A concert of sounds erupt as he rummages around, tossing pots and an unusual number of kettles aside. For hours, there's only the sound of welding and forging. Near the end of the day, he wipes his brow in satisfaction. "Behold gentlefolk, and also the kobolds calling me fake right now! Here's my jalapeno-Flavored | Porcelain | Khakkara | With Wings!" "Hey, if that's porcelain, how did you forg-" "Gnomish secrets," he chuckles at the non-believer. "First I'll tell you why this is the best for food. The headpiece of this khakkara happens to have a jalapeno enchantment on it, so it'll add that heat to anything you rest on it. While you may have a lot of metal, as any adventurer does, porcelain has its benefits in cooking as well. The spikes are sharp enough to carve with, and strong enough to crack through bone. There's no need to worry about chipping, since enchanted things tend to be much more resistant. The metal wings attached are useful for cooking simple things on, like eggs or even fish. And also, a khakkara usually carries a lot of rings hooped through the hollow headpiece. I've attached hooks to these so you can carry all manner of food from them, like garlic." "As a weapon, it's pretty simple to operate. It's a bit like a fancy spear. I bet you could put meat on the end and still drive the steak through a vampire!" Cabagarth chuckles alone in the crowd.