Player Comments on pokemon log date 17

This wasn't even "funny bad," it was just bad. You committed the worst sin a writer / game creator possibly can: you were boring.

Sorry, but I don't really think you tried.

Troll Troll Troll Troll Troll Troll Troll Troll Troll Troll... sigh I have suspicions you are a Troll. If you are not a Troll your writing has a long way to go. Even my Pokemon Game specifically about how not to write was better written than this (but my errors were more interesting than yours). If you want free advice on how not to write check that out or read the Help & Info Articles listed here.

-Check the grammar
-Don't forget it's supposed to be a journal log.
-Don't bring Undertale in this bruh.
-It was very hard to follow.
-Don't comment on your own game *facepalm*
-1/8

Da fuq don't rate your own game stupid

Doesn't anyone see the authors name below the title and in the comments?

*deep breath*
1: This story has terrible grammar.
2: You pulled an undertale reference... in pokemon? What?
3: The description tells me nothing important, if I'm honest.
4: The description also lied to me.
5: This was extremely short.
6: You made it into parts.
7: The plot seems to jump around.
8: There are no special or important characters. (I learned that mistake already.)
9: Felt rushed.
10: Why do you start it as a journal log, but scratch the idea later?

Soo.... Can't give it more than a 1.
Unpublish and fix, I suppose.