Player Comments on Roman > ChooseYourStory.com

Very interesting story idea and great use of pictures, however due to the story being too short, it feels very linear, there is barely any character development, the change in scene to being a gladiator feels too sudden.
Overall, it feels that you made fast food with top grade meat,
still tastes great, but wasted a lot of wasted potential.

-- T1loltractor on 5/1/2013 6:15:58 AM with a score of 0

You had a good thing going there then it went south....very abroupt ending

-- DarthNelly on 4/12/2013 10:39:02 AM with a score of 0

Loved it, great fight scenes, realistic yet interesting plot, loved the use of pictures, and its not one of those games where you have to be selfish to live.

PS: loved my ending, i call it the 3-way ending!!

-- mr_baggins on 3/26/2013 8:50:49 PM with a score of 0

Thought it was brilliant but way too short

-- Luke on 2/6/2013 4:47:45 PM with a score of 0

The characters weren't really developed

-- hugo23 on 11/28/2012 10:30:00 AM with a score of 0

YAY! I GOT BOTH GIRLS!

-- Amy2 on 11/18/2012 3:52:29 AM with a score of 0

i like your story very much. i also bekeive in chivalry, wjich i only broke once in this story to kill the first cabin girl, but i got to fight to the end without being a panzy and running. usually in other stories you die from that course pf action. good job ******

-- veldric1 on 11/15/2012 12:12:30 AM with a score of 0

I liked you use of pictures, but your story was not that impressive, and there was some spelling errors. 5

-- CovElite on 9/23/2012 2:15:44 AM with a score of 0

ARE YOU NOT ENTERTAINED, ARE YOU NOT ENTERTAINED! WELL FUCK YOU, IM GOING TO GO HAVE A THREESOME!

-- CovElite on 9/23/2012 2:13:47 AM with a score of 0

a lot of spelling errors,and kind of short,but great story and choices

-- monkeyduke2 on 7/11/2012 5:27:53 PM with a score of 0

Nice

-- RobustSporadic on 6/26/2012 6:46:47 AM with a score of 0

Really great use of pictures and items. Nice job.

-- JMgskills on 5/5/2012 7:13:57 PM with a score of 0

Not a bad story overall.There were many grammatical and spelling mistakes but other wise well done!

-- mobby123 on 3/6/2012 4:20:41 PM with a score of 0

It was very good but there were some confusions like when I got captured in the Celt home it said the woman looked about 20, but when I held the sword/knife to her neck it says 'you focus your attention on the OLD lady. A 20 year old is not and old person. And when I kill Cynthia I say 'You saved my life. I needed to return the favour.'to Brina. Cynthia saved me not Brina. And when I kill Brina I say 'You the only person i ever loved.' which okay I guess but you should switch them around since it makes more sense.

-- SEULaw on 3/5/2012 10:46:14 PM with a score of 0

only wish it was longuer

-- alexxo97 on 2/4/2012 5:58:23 PM with a score of 0

it was good

-- . on 1/14/2012 5:57:19 PM with a score of 0

Liked the historical content.

-- Chris on 9/27/2011 12:48:54 AM with a score of 0

very good story

-- DarkentityOni on 8/21/2011 10:45:37 AM with a score of 0

good story

-- Agrusar on 8/15/2011 9:03:20 AM with a score of 0

I love this story! The only downpart was the minor spelling mistakes.

-- Lilfti332 on 7/8/2011 11:35:44 PM with a score of 0

It would have been better if there were links instead of item uses, but other than that this was good. 5/8

-- RiterOfWrandom on 7/7/2011 11:33:16 AM with a score of 0

I loved the ending.

-- cool74 on 6/7/2011 6:29:57 PM with a score of 0

Spelling errors, other than that it was great. Bo approves.

-- ThisisBo on 5/18/2011 8:33:56 PM with a score of 0

I LOVE IT!!

-- alienalpha on 4/30/2011 9:40:26 PM with a score of 0

Lmao best ending... 2 different girls :D sick game

-- Jon on 4/15/2011 11:06:44 PM with a score of 0

One of the best I've done so far

-- Killer999 on 3/30/2011 11:21:52 AM with a score of 0

It was awesome.

-- Readerguy on 3/20/2011 6:24:00 PM with a score of 0

It's okay but the pages are rather long. I would have liked it if there were more choices on each page , but thats just my opinion.

-- bradhal on 2/27/2011 10:28:15 AM with a score of 0

This was awesome I'm begging you to please make a sequel as awesome as this one! You seriously have talent.

-- meeee on 2/20/2011 5:49:55 PM with a score of 0

I liked it very much, I got all 3 endings!

-- yourname on 2/5/2011 9:30:34 PM with a score of 0

Wow. I wish I knew that the editor could make a player drop items. That would have come in handy. Thanks for reading and rating! Im slowly getting the hang of this advanced editor.

-- spartan008 on 2/1/2011 6:53:01 PM with a score of 0

Prefix: You can use the editor to make items drop! Use the little yellow bag to the left of links.

Your stories come out really quickly, you go from planning to writing to publishing very quickly. Pause between writing and publishing! You need to fix your tenses and spelling. It's really distracting and detracts from your work. Particularly when jumping from narrative to description, you hop from present to past and this is VERY distracting. Ruins the unity.

The story was cool but I felt like I was playing through a conglomerate of the movies CENTURION and GLADIATOR. You really lost me once I was made into a Gladiator back in Rome. I felt like it didn't flow with the story. The Romans weren't so impulsive in their decisions.

It wasn't bad at all though, good effort and my favorite of yours. You have tons of potential, just work a little harder on the gritty parts of writing.

-- JJJ-thebanisher on 2/1/2011 5:29:16 PM with a score of 0

wow. You def. put alot of work into this one. I loved the way you developed your characters. I only died twice before I made it to the end. You also made me make a really hard decision at the end, which I liked. All in all a good story. 7 out of 8!

-- sutherngirl on 2/1/2011 5:15:47 PM with a score of 0

That was a goodd game.

-- kalun on 2/1/2011 12:42:26 AM with a score of 0