JJJ-thebanisher, The λReader
I'm 3J, I've been around for awhile, shoot me any questions if you have them.
Disclaimer: I was about 12 years old when I wrote this. - 3J
Play as Mattias, a young boy destined to do great things. Become King, befriend a samurai, get the Destiny sword, gather knights, make a friend in the form of a horse. If that wasn't enouph you also will fulfill a prophecy, meet a water nymph and greet a magician. All here in Mattias, THE one KNIGHT!
UPDATES, PLEASE TAKE A LOOK
V1. Completed, Many spelling errors. Please Forgive
V2. Eased it up a little bit, changed two restrictions.
V3. Changed Description, fixed a few spelling errors.
V4. Fixed first of Mining village bugs. (Added link to steps)
V5. Fixed the rest of the Mining village Bugs. (Took the price from 7000 down to 1400 and fixed some bad links) and Added some clues and another way to get the Destiny Sword. Thanx March I cant wait to be on the front page.
V6. Added tons of pictires fixed some spelling errors and slightly edited the description.
V7. A couple more spelling errors fixed, I think from Tidus3?
One in a million, Few Total.
Power, Speed, Intelligence are key.
They deliver the desperate hope
Eliminate the Engineers of Evil
The Groke don't think so.
The Paraplaniacs are benevolent.
madglee - Testing
Sethaniel - Testing
Aerostar - Came up with the name for the Grokes. First to listen to my idea for the Paraplaniacs.
The Matrix & Jumper - Influences.
You can save only at Shrines.
If you die, your link will be only a number, the higher the number the better you've done.
If you find yourself with very few options, try going back to your last shrine and spending your experience differently. Choices in battle are affected by your abilities.
A negative score, is a result of screwing all of the known universe. A positive score, is a result in success.
1 - Published.
In a galaxy even further away from the last one, the sith have taken control of the inner thirty five planets and have destroyed the other ourty five hundred. All this in hope of keeping the galaxy entirely to themselves. The sith have fled from the last galaxy when Luke Skywalker destroyed them. Four endings.
Author - JJJ-thebanisher
Illustrators - Simpsons, somerandomperson (many thanks)
Editors - Miccy2000, somerandomperson
Game Tester: Somerandomperson, JJJ-thebanisher, Eddy, Canucks.
Special thanks to - Alexp, MikeJ & Jedisplurge.com, also starwarss.com (Its meant to have the extra S) has been an amazing help.
Any of the score totals could go over by a couple hundred.
Best Ending - Saved the jedi monarch and converted the galaxy to a peaceful rule. Destroyed sith mothercruiser. (Will have around 62, 000 points.)
Good Ending - Converted Galaxy to a peaceful rule. Destroyed Sith mothercruiser. (Will have around 21, 500)
Mediocre Ending - Converted Galaxy to a peaceful rule. (will have around 13, 000 points)
Bad Ending - Died or became incapacitated along the way. (Could have next to any amount, but probably not more then 5000, could not possibley be more then 11, 000)
version 1 - Completed, edited and some pictures.
Blue versus red in a classic battle of good versus evil and right versus wrong.
This is more story than game and a lot more story than anything I've written previously.
There is one true ending (marked by a stirring legend), one other really good ending and there are at least two other legitimate endings. All legitimate endings include epilogues.
G(l)aile is a young man, living in the outskirts. His father is a wealthy merchant in Sanctum. He plans on setting out to see his father, but many things turn up and his adventure goes rotten. Hunt for your food, collect ten different weapons each with a generic set of uses in the game,complete difficult puzzles, defeat trolls, persuade orcs, complete quests, evade or hunt massive tribes of wandering cannibals, combat shadows, save your father, find out a long dead truth about your family and yourself and destroy the tower -- pillar of evil. All here in the Tower.
madglee - Thank you for helping me with editing, providing support and testing. Actually you've tested my game a BAZILLION of times, and I thank you so much. Your pinpoint editing skills have come in more then handy. You rule dude. Actually you go beyond that, you just plain KICKASS!
Exiled Phoenix - You really supported me and gave me great compliments that helped me keep going.
Havacoman - No matter what are differences are, you kick ass at pictures.
Weedy - Thanks for some of the item pictures man.
Table of Contents -- Chapters
The Road to Sanctum
The City of Sanctum
The Mountain pass
Tips and Hints
Visit everything you can before leaving an area, always upgrade your statistics if you can. If you don't you may find yourself stuck. READ EVERYTHING. Also visit libraries for important tips on the game. Getting the most weapons as you can is essential as well.
There are three/four endings. One of them you don't get to leave comments on.
Death - No commenting.
Bad - Commenting (Score in the negatives)
Medium - Commenting (Score in the positives)
Good - Commenting (Score over 100 Grand)
Do not say this in your comments PLEASE!!!!
I realize that not every link displays a page number. This is because, previous page links, next chapter links, and links that have nothing to do with the story get nothing. DO NOT BASE YOUR COMMENTS ON THIS!!!!
I also realize that its very possible to cheat in many parts of the game. Deal with it. Cheaters will be cheaters.
I also also realize that sometimes when you die or win a battle, the events will be hazy. There are two reasons for this, one I cant reveal as it partains to the story. However battles in this game are not "hollywood-ised". Often people die without knowing what happened. Suddenly your laying there with blood pooling from your arteries and you have no idea what happened. That happens quite a bit in the game.
The length in this game varies based on your difficulty level and your choices. It can be anywhere from a length six to a length eight.
The JJJ Challenge
If you either beat this game with the best ending I will send you (via e-mail) a formatted strategy guide of the tower including how to get the best possible score, in the making, secrets of the game, complete walk through, and most importantly G(l)ailes epilogue.
You will need the password from the end of the first "Tower" to play this game! (The one in invisible text between two brackets on the last page). Don't worry; if you forgot it and can prove you beat the game by having a comment of over 100,000 score, then I will tell you the password.
What happened to Glaile post death? Can't give away much because it can ruin the Tower I! This will be the introduction to the land of Serennia. Think about it like the Hobbit to the Lord of The Rings.
STORY: 0 - Arrive from Far Land (Everywhere)
View http://www.myadventuregame.com/story/All_About_Serennia.aspx for more about the timeline.
Sir_Lancegalawain - Excellent support and quest writing
madglee - My most trusted advisor (And Goddam can he ever write :D Go mommy Go)
Solostrike - Scripting
Java - Pics and Some proofreading (on mine because Lance's work is usually without error)
October - Some Editing.
DarthVader_13 - Testing.
Commentors (fans) - Thank so much
I would have liked to keep Lance as co-author but his life became busy and he could not help me in the end. Thank you for writing the quests you did! You were my number one special thanks.
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Recent PostsFebruary Flash Fiction Contest Feedback Thread on 2/19/2017 9:46:35 PM
My own personal thoughts on the ones that I didn't commend:
@Theotian -- The dialogue felt unnatural in this story, and I noticed many grammatical and phrasing issues.
@Orange -- This was a pretty good attempt but I didn't feel like the protagonist was well characterized. She had the markings of a wealthy, popular and outgoing socialite (able to host a sweet 16 at an art gallery, and people actually showed up!) but then we're told that only one person in the whole school is nice to her?
@ericyopy -- The writing could use a revision or three to make the sentences flow better. There were also a number of grammatical issues. I also don't think that we were given enough information to care about the man or his cause.
@MrMustacho -- This was a decent attempt but I think it would work better if it was made clear who the narrator is talking to, and why.
@firegrill -- As mentioned previously, I think the grandmother's internal monologue sounded really awkward, and I thought that the story itself felt a little bit like a trope about every new generation.
@Malkalack -- This was a good attempt and close to commendable. I felt like a number of sentences ended sort of awkwardly "started at it" and in one of the paragraphs, the usage of 'however' was too frequent. I'm not sure if I'd commit to this criticism but I felt like the transition from description to action was a bit jarring.
@BenCrucifix -- This was a cool twist, and while I knew that it wasn't going to be a prison, I didn't realize that it was going to be a school. Unfortunately, this style of deliberate deception only works if the reader doesn't see a twist coming at all.
@Agstand -- Picturing this was hilarious but I think the teacher's response was half-baked, and Ralph's internal thought process could be improved. I think I'd like to see you commit to the absurdity a little more too.
@StillWatersRunDeep -- This was insanely close to commendable. I think the death and transition to the afterlife needed a bit more fleshing out and it would have been fine to cut out some of the earlier parts of the piece. I'd suggest killing a bit of the Mary Scott part, since she's really not that interesting compared to the ending.
@TheNewIAP -- This was also extremely close to commendable but I really didn't like the last sentence. It was jarring to place me into the story because until that point, you had the reader trying to decide which character to side with. Once you've inserted us into the prose personally, I feel like the interesting thought experiment becomes more hollow. I also felt like the sentence itself wasn't particularly great and I wouldn't mind a finishing sentence more in line with an ambiguous finish so we don't know what the outcome will be for the kid.
@Will11 -- This was a good story and close to commendable. I was a bit confused about the protagonist. Through the first two paragraphs I got the feeling that this was a person who was really in touch with the world and with nature's processes but then I find out that she's killing herself over a rejection, and it felt contradictory. I think it would be better to omit her reasoning altogether, personally.
@Kwism1127 -- This was pretty good, but I think the writing could be improved in terms of clarity. It's a little hard to follow the plot and there were a couple repeated words/phrases that detracted from the writing.
@Naomi14 -- I thought that this was surprisingly good. I liked that you wrote a legitimate story that was paced well. I felt like there was some convenience-writing though, it seems weird that the protagonist was able to watch them walk all the way to the ferris wheel, presumably wait in line, end up in a specific carriage, and then eventually kiss, all the while doing absolutely nothing. I might also remove the carnie altogether and replace his part with more about the protagonist.
If any of the above want to post improved versions as replies to this post, I'll consider commending them if there have been significant improvements.
February Flash Fiction Contest Feedback Thread on 2/18/2017 4:06:28 AM
Makes some sense.
February Flash Fiction Contest Feedback Thread on 2/18/2017 4:02:44 AM
@firegrill That was pleasant and I see what you were going for. I think the last paragraph could have used some serious work, and some of the wording was a little awkward, but it was a really enjoyable read.
@malkalack What does Sir Abraham get out of fighting in the arena?
Mafia Game on 2/17/2017 1:08:19 AM
It doesn't look like anything to me.
For Honor on 2/17/2017 1:07:46 AM
I think Malk likes it. A couple of my friends really like it but I think it looks super boring.
What is an "Order"? on 2/15/2017 10:40:19 AM
You can't quintuple x by y. You can quintuple x or quintuple y, but quintupling x by y doesn't mean anything.
Experienced Writers/Editors on 2/13/2017 11:09:39 PM
@mizal @StrykerL @Steve24833
v20170008 Update on 2/12/2017 7:47:30 PM
And they're sorted / not random :)
Expand Yearly Rankings on 2/12/2017 2:38:45 PM
Display all of the storygames that are ranked for a given year instead of the top 10.
Link to All Order Stats on 2/12/2017 1:47:18 PM