The 46th Annual Hunger Games

Player Rating2.62/8

"Too few ratings to be ranked"
based on 192 ratings since
played times (finished )

Story Difficulty6/8

"wandering through the desert"

Play Length3/8

"A nice jog down the driveway"

Maturity Level5/8

"aren't you a little too old to be trick or treating"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 13. If this were a movie, it would probably be PG-13.

Tags

I will leave the plot a suprise. This game has violence such as slaughtering, killing, and infections. Only for ages 13+

Player Comments

I'm afraid this story suffers from the same problems as your first.

Problem number one: my character just killed five or six other kids, but I, the reader, feel nothing. Why? Because I don't even know what they look like. You give at least some of them names, but nothing more than that. Why should I care if all I see of someone is their name? Make me care. Tell me that the boy I just speared is afraid of dying, blood seeping into his coat and his short brown hair, gurgling as his eyes go dark. Make me feel, not just scratch off names.

Almost none of the scenery is described either. What if, instead of going to the Hunger Games movie, you were given a radio show. "District Five boy just killed District One boy." And that was all you got. Would you care? Could you even visualize the scene? We're meant to be in the story. Tell us what we see, hear, and smell in the forest. When we climb the tree, tell us what the bark feels like. Give us scrapes and bruises, stickiness of the sap. Make us feel like we're there.

Finally, there aren't really any choices in this game. Everything is either "you live" or "you die." There is only one right path leading to one ending, so there's no point in playing the story more than once. Give us multiple branches of story to choose from and more control over the character than "right" or "wrong". Make us want to see what happens next when we click a choice instead of "one of these is game over. Probably that one. Ok, let's move on."

Try reading some of the highly rated stories on the site. Endmaster, BerkaZerka, JJJthebanisher, these people are successful for a reason. When you write something, ask yourself, "if this was a novel, would people buy it? If this wasn't my story, would I play it twice?" When the total text in all branches of the story adds up to a page at most and there is no emotion or description at all, the answer to both will be "no".
-- Sszinid on 1/3/2014 5:28:27 PM with a score of 0
not good, doesn't make sense
-- no on 11/27/2020 10:58:47 AM with a score of 0
it is so addicting
-- bigz123 on 10/8/2019 8:15:49 AM with a score of 0
its great
-- bigz123 on 10/7/2019 2:20:37 PM with a score of 0
It happened so fast, it was boring
-- Elijah on 11/17/2016 12:49:25 PM with a score of 0
This was just bad and extremely unlikely to happen in an hunger games
-- Terrible plot!!! on 10/13/2016 7:56:47 PM with a score of 0
It has a nice concept but it was too short to develop any nice plot
-- Turbotorque on 6/19/2016 11:58:37 AM with a score of 0
Umm. Ok we're to begin. Well I one the whole thing the second time I tried so it is so easy.
-- Kitten on 6/14/2016 4:57:06 AM with a score of 0
Pretty good... if you are a beginner reader.
-- TK0805 on 4/19/2016 8:10:26 AM with a score of 0
You can't hear a cannon if you have an arrow through your head...
-- CurseOfTime on 3/30/2016 5:35:19 PM with a score of 0
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