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Hey I have a story game going here that I like, but I am unsure if I want to finish it or start a new one. The story is just done with the first chapter and I can tell it's going to be long and difficult writing process, however I would be most excited to accept this challenge if you all believe it ahs the potential to be a good game. Please post any comments or criticism and don't be afraid to be critical I appreciate every comment. Test Dragons Of Iralnir

Alright, the term is dismount not unhorse.

I think it would make sense if you were immune to fire since that sword is in you.

Also, this was a great piece of writing. But, you should really finish it dude.

Keep up the good work!

Thanks for trying it out!! I'm glad you liked it. For your first comment, I found what you were talking about and unhorse is the term I want to use there, however, I very crudely phrased that sentence and have reworded it to be more smooth. For your second comment, I really like this idea, however I don't think I will apply it to the sword. I would likely to fully explain, however, if I do I would give out a great deal of spoilers. I am going to add your idea into the story though. Thank you for your support and criticism. 

Your welcome bro, Anytime.