urnam0, The Apprentice Scrivener

Member Since

1/8/2009

Last Activity

5/26/2024 7:31 PM

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1,756

Post Count

290

Storygame Count

3

Duel Stats

21 wins / 25 losses

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Architect Exemplar

Commendations

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My favorite online CYOA games are The Paradox Factor, Ground Zero, Necromancer, Eternal, and The Devil's Fire.

 

 

 

 

"I bring ... death! How dare you try and give me life?"

 

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Earning 100 Points Earning 500 Points Earning 1,000 Points Having 2 Storygame(s) Featured Given by BerkaZerka on 08/30/2021 - Oh hey! Nice to see you around again! Given by Will11 on 01/14/2018 - For your great stories

Storygames

The Flame

An allegory.

 

Author's note: the title of this story is actually The Fire, but someone else already created a storygame with that title, so I couldn't give it the title that I wanted. My second choice for the title was The Light, but another person already took that title as well, so, if you don't mind, just pretend that the title of this story is The Fire.


Featured Story Warlords: Strategic Conquest

A story set in medieval China.

Note: Even early on in the game you can lose by making a strategically erroneous choice so choose carefully.


Featured Story Where in the World Is Carmen Sandiego?

witwics

My interpretation of one of my favorite TV shows from childhood: Where in the World Is Carmen Sandiego? This work is primarily based on the TV game show version rather than the computer game, book, or cartoon versions.

Author's note: Please do not cheat by using the Back button- just remember to Save the game every time you're promoted and Restore if you happen to lose.

 

P.S. See if you can find all the Easter Eggs!


Recent Posts

Thunderdome 11: Bezro vs Suranna vs ???? on 5/18/2024 9:20:39 AM

Story B.


2nd CYS Review Competition! on 5/1/2024 12:30:17 PM

How about the writing of a cameo appearance for the winner into your next story, or whenever a character based on or at least named after the winner becomes feasible?


Greetings! Looking for a particular story on 4/25/2024 12:36:51 PM

Maybe Rogues.


Free Reviews Here! on 4/19/2024 9:59:31 PM

Well, that was my CYS reading for the day.

I still can't tell if you like puzzles or not lol.

Thank you for the review.


Free Reviews Here! on 4/12/2024 8:42:13 PM

Arakhan’s Vengeance


Contest End is near! on 4/2/2024 5:13:24 AM

RIP to the New storygames published just before the contest deadline.

I felt like making a ranking of all of the contest storygame titles, as there's no way in hell I'm going to be able to read many of these long-ass stories. I considered several factors, such as how much it made me want to read the story, elegance of phrasing, word choice, succinctness, and technical aspects, like capitalization and grammar.

 

In order of (to me, personally) most appealing title to the least:

 

Avarga- memorable, punchy, unique, even starts with the first letter in the alphabet, which gets the story more views if titles are in alphabetical order

Where the Clouds Want to Go- evocative, clouds are always nice in a title, a bit long

A Prayer for Destruction- solid, destruction might be a little generic, but the rest of the title is certainly eye-catching, good phrasing

The Sojourner's Home- clear, but suggestive of a story a bit on the boring side, good word choice

Cleansed- solid, positive word choice connotations, limited impact of meaning

Reborn- solid, positive word choice connotations, limited impact of meaning

The Caverns of Grobblebad- I liked it until Grobblebad, that just sounds too silly for me

The Grand Pharaoh's Tomb- a bit basic, but at least it's clear in what the story is going to be about

The Red Church- punchy, a bit unclear in what the story is about

Revenge on the River Lord- decent and solid, nothing particularly good or bad

How To Bring an End to Things?- feels like it could be shortened, somewhat unique

The Village That Was- a bit evocative, otherwise a bit boring

A Hill to Die On- a cliche, somewhat evocative

The Boy Who Would Be Duke - The Journey to Agincourt - just a wee bit long, but I do like how it is pretty clear what the story would be about

Polaris- though meaningful, there's already quite a few things and works with the same title, leading to confusion over suggested themes

Terrorist- basic

Golden Gaze - Establishing a foothold- capitalization error, not clear what story is about despite all of the words being real words, slightly interesting word choice

The Rand'o Quiz- I mean, it's a weird word construction, but at least I can get the gist of it from the title

Distant Past- sounds like a chapter title in a geography/history textbook, boring

DRIVE- generic and forgettable word choice, jarring capitalization scheme


I need some innuendos on 3/6/2024 6:10:20 PM

Knocking boots

Hiding the bishop

Jamming the clam

Tossing the salad

 


Guild Names on 2/7/2024 12:54:47 PM

Cool. If you're going for simple names, then another one for a jewelry guild might be The Ring.

It might be easier to come up with names for them if you conceive of what kinds of guilds they are and types of crimes they commit first.


Guild Names on 2/7/2024 11:20:51 AM

The Syndicate

The Seven Seas (C's)- a (could be water-based, but doesn't have to be) guild with a long reach, with seven leaders all with names starting with C or something

The Numbers- I actually got this idea from a story that I read before but can't remember the name of where a criminal organization was highly secretive and each member was designated by a number only, with the founder numbered 1 and each subsequent member getting the next number, and no one knowing the real names of any other members and always referring to each other by number only

24K- precious metal/jewelry guild consisting of 24 killers or something like that

By the way, what ever happened to that magical fantasy creatures representing emotions thing that you were working on a while ago?


How do I make character stats work? on 1/16/2024 1:27:05 PM

Read the Help & Info articles, you should.