Player Comments on A Jail Cell

There's no context. You're just thrown into this cell, and have to get out. A lot of it is pretty realistic, like searching the ground of your tiny square cell and finding nothing for ages, then clicking search a few more times and finding a bloody bomb. Like how did the main character miss the bomb the first scan around the room!?
Also, while your grammar is good, some of your wording is just straight up weird. 'despite the brittle demeanor of the stone...'
All in all, if you put more effort into making a puzzle game I'm sure you could make a good one.
2/8

What was the point?

Short as it was, the game was quite enjoyable, compared to other games I have seen recently, the grammar wasn't all that bad and the premise was a good one, the only things that bothered me is that it's too short, the descriptions all around feel very mechanical, emotionless, really. And last, we lack a general backstory of both the character and the jail itself.

1) The grammar, was ok compared to what I have seen on other recent storygames, it isn't great, but it is something that you can write a storygame with, however, that does not mean that you should not try to improve.

2) The escape from jail, or rather maybe from a abandoned jail cell? Either way, the general premise is one that I enjoy and I would've enjoyed it even more if there were more puzzles, or choosing from trying to sneak-escape from the jail, or organizing a massive escape attempt with the rest of the prisoners.

3) It's too short, there's no way out of this. This game is too short to give a player any sort of long term enjoyment. I mean, they will enjoy this for a moment, but since it was so short(and so easy) that feeling of triumph will quickly vanish, please try to make games like these longer.

4) When I read the first page, then the rest of the game, it felt like a machine wrote the game not a human being with emotions and while that isn't very bad, it helps if you add emotions to both your story and your characters.

5) What I would've absolutely loved to see is the backstory of the character and how he got in this seemingly abandoned jail cell in the first place. Was he falsely accused? Was he actually a criminal? And I would've loved to see a general backstory of the jail/jail cell itself since it seemed like it was abandoned. I mean, is this jail abandoned? And if so, why is our character in there? Too many question and no answers.

On short, I've actually enjoyed it enough to see my character get through to the good end(I'm ashamed to say that I have died twice) and though it has a few major problems, it is actually a game worth your time... especially since it is so short in the first place.

I give this a 4/8 and I hope that I see even better games from you in the future!

To short. Where are the popo?

too easy to escape, no story as to why you are in the cell, you need more details.

To easy

Its needs more options. Good for a first story

Short. Dumb makes you loose

I think the only reason I escaped was because I have common sense.

"You have died!" :D Yay!

Why do I have explosives in the jail cell?

Great game but you should add more things to it like have cops come and say what are you doing and give choices to say. Altho great game.

Not bad for a first story :)

Not bad for such a short story. I found it really pointless though when you were searching the ground and the options kept coming up of either "keep looking" or "give up." It's the most pointless choice you could give and I had to make it twice. :p

love it

Pretty good for your first game, could have been longer/more options but overall it was fine.

I would try adding detail to make the area more immersive, like some Edgar Allen Poe type shit.

Nice story

Good story, but what fun is a jail without rape?

Well, this is your first game.

I'd recommend putting more options and paths to choose from.

This game has a good concept, but it could be improved in terms of detail.

3/8

It's okay for a first game, but it's pretty short and could be improved.

Based on my personal experience of jails this place sounds like Mexico :).

These "escape from" ideas are ok but they always need more background: why am I in prison? Why do I have small military-style explosives littering the floor of my cell? Is that normal? Escape-from things work quite well with a Fantasy theme because you can make a whole dungeon out of them, alternatively you can go for Modern Adventure and bring the whole apparatus of a spy seeking to escape his villanous captors in (I'm thinking James Bond here), always try to think how your stories can be improved :).

This is ok but it needs expanding on massively and being far longer.