Player Comments on Fey Light

Dude.

That was really good. Oftentimes, stories have an issue with starting off slow. Even though they may be good later on, they depend on a reader's attention span, and in this day and age, that is a rare commodity.

But you grabbed my attention right from the start, when we literally know nothing about the character except that he's about to eat a fairy.

I chose the option where you spare the creature, but for shits and giggles, I later went back to see what would happen if you did eat the creature, and it was pretty gruesome.

You have a talent with words. You don't slam the reader with something shocking right away, but you take your time, using sensory details to paint a picture, and then you go full force with the shock value. That scene was hard to read, especially when you break the fairy's sternum.

I really loved everything about this story. You put tons of effort in the art, as soon as I clicked on the story, I knew I was in for a good one. And the way each page looked like it was from a story book.

There are two types of writing. There's the short, punchy, to the point kind, and there's the paint a picture with a thousand words. Your writing style is the second kind, and boy did it make reading this so much fun. It felt like I was in. another world, and I really appreciate your attention to detail in describing the protagonist's surroundings and the weather. I liked some of your word choices and just the figures of speech you used to paint the picture.

I also like how thematically you stay consistent the whole time. The episode at the beginning isn't a one off where it's super interesting and then it falls flat. You clearly know where to take this and you have a set direction in mind. The protagonist continuously struggles with a battle between good, and well, woe.

Overall, I'd give this a 7/8. I really enjoyed reading this story, this was a fantastic entry for Sherbet's contest. I really think you could make a sequel on this, as long as you take the same amount of time and care you spent on this one for that story. Well done