7/30/2024

11/13/2025 10:54 PM

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1511 wins / 1485 losses

Marauder

Gay and Depressed in Prison

3rd place entry in Corgi's Gaybellion Contest

In this game, you play a very familiar character from the previous Gay and Depressed stories, who is now in jail. You used to be a side character in other people's stories, but now the spotlight is finally yours in this Gay and Depressed spin-off!

If you're interested in some more Gay and Depressed story games, check out the original by queenlatifah04, Gay Old Time by Darius_Conwright, Gay and DepressedER!!! by fresh_out_of_the_oven, and Gay and Depressed: The snow bunny society by Benholman44. All of the "gay and depressed" stories are stand-alone stories, so each one can be read separately, but I highly recommend you check these stories out!

Also, congrats on submitting your story to the thunderdome! I better keep working on mine. I can't wait to see what you wrote. Best of luck!

Don't beat yourself up Avo. Focus on getting it in. You'd be surprised how many people mess up and don't submit anything. By submitting, you'd already be above many competitors. I bet you'll be happy with the results, by the end. Just focus on doing the best you can!

Aw thanks, Avo! That's really nice of you! I hope to have 1 more storygame by December 1st, my Edutainment contest entry. Best of luck with Shifter! I can't wait to see it in December, it should be quite cool and science-y!

That's really nice of you, Liminal! Honestly that's really cool. But you don't have to, I'm totally fine with giving away points! Still, it really means a lot for you to say that. And your donation to Enter as well, very generous! I wonder what the total is. I think if we added them all up, we'd be in the neighborhood of 3000 points.

That sounds really cool Avery!

Nice! Which escape room was your favorite?

Very cool! Is that the escape-room job?

It's good to see you again Avery! How have you been?

Short Answer: Watch a bunch of Aaron Sorkin movies. I love the way Sorkin writes dialogue in The Social Network. I guess a downside would be that in real life, people aren't that smooth and quick on their feet sometimes, trading witty zingers back and forth, so I guess that snappy, comeback style wouldn't lend itself to verisimilitude. But I like the way he handles dialogue, it feels cool. Long Answer. That's a good question. Honestly, I wish I knew the answer to this one. Dialogue is my kryptonite. But I can commiserate with you in your miseries, and if you want a few laughs, check out my short stories/storygames for some crappy/horrendous dialogue. I think my swords and sorcery short story was a bit better in terms of dialogue, at least a few of the lines made me laugh, but the serial killer one was kind of bad. There's a reason why in my Christmas slasher story, the dialogue is "I heard there's a baddie in the woods", only to be responded with "we should go check it out anyway". Like, I'm pretty sure real people would just run the other direction or at least remark on how stupid it is that they're knowingly going into a forest with a known serial killer, but I had to convey the information necessary for the plot somehow. But it's clunky and annoying when I look back on it. So I guess my advice would be, don't be like me and use dialogue as a mere vehicle, simply for moving the plot from one stage to another. That's a recipe for forgetful and boring characters. I learned this the hard way. I can't give you advice on what you should do, since this is an area where I'm a bit retarded on, but I guess by knowing what not to do, you can do the reverse of that, and do what you should do. Ninja is pretty good at dialogue. Check out some of his stories, I like the way he uses dialogue in his stories. Actually, all the great authors here are good with dialogue, but I like Ninja's in particular because of how he pairs this introspective sentence with a line of dialogue, making each line a person says feel intentional and purposeful, while also coming across as clever and witty. That's hard to nail, and Ninja makes it look seamless.

Yay! There's definitely no inter-gazette nepotism going on here.