Player Comments on Fruit Tale

It was less stupid than I thought it would be. I really liked the concept, oddly enough, but it was way too short to go anywhere interesting. I wanted more characterisation. Surely a pineapple would act/talk different than an orange would.

Guerrilla warfare, vegan style...

What just happened?

What did I just read?

so no matter what you get blown up. cool.

The story reminds me of the movie "Saussage Party" although more mediocre in length and quality. Too many fruit characters are introduced and you can't really get a grip on who the main character is. Except for watermelon. It definitely needs work.

This was fun to play through, though it was really silly. World domination by fruit!

question: do you by any chance love fruit? all I have to say about this is dot dot dot

The grammar and spelling is the only good part of this story. I'd say the concept is good, but it is unoriginal. You stole the concept from Sausage Party. It is also too rushed. There is nothing here to make me feel anything towards the fruit, other than the urge to take a sledge to them. The characters have no depth outside of being fruit. Also I know nothing about the setting. All you say is, "some guy's house." That could be a one story, one bedroom house, or it could be a mansion. Also like the anonymous guy said, the names are uninventive. You obviously put no effort what so ever into this story. I'd suggest you unpublish this and then work on it some more.

This was an interesting concept, reasonably well written and with a few choices, humorous characters and situations to make it readable - the extremely short length is a major factor that will affect it's ratings but to be honest it's impressive the concept was turned into an interesting story of any length at all and I guess it went as far as it could go. I think it'd be interesting to see more from this author in the future as there are some nice ideas and humour here as long as it doesn't verge into the silly=funny area or mutual self-congratulation of alts or something :) 4/8

It was a little short for my liking, but I really liked the tone you created. I would be very interested in playing a game like this with more fleshed out characters and more paths to follow. I approve!

Very linear, short, and otherwise bland. Also, I feel like you double/triple spaced the lines on purpose to make it feel longer than it really was (didn't really work in my opinion)

At the very least, you didn't make any spelling mistakes, and the concept was a tad bit interesting. Fruit rising up against humans is certainly unique. If you could expand on this at all, that'd be nice. Also come up with some more original names, please. "General Grape" and "Captain Orange" aren't exactly flowing eloquence, if you know what I mean.

That was beautiful, glorious. This is the best story about fruits that I've ever read. Captain Orange seemed like the best captain in the history of fruit captains and the fact that he (almost) brutally kills the human is much appreciated. Well done, Grape, you actually wrote a well written story about a bunch of fruits, congratuverylations. I didn't notice any grammar or spelling mistakes and the story was well paced, in spite of it being fairly short.