Player Comments on The Hound of the Timkervilles

beautiful, made me cry

Okay, my three stories are fairly linear (1st one only had 4 possible plot/ending combinations; 2nd had several ways to get to only two endings; third had several ways to get to only three endings), but this makes even me look like a branching story genius. I mean, I'm trying not to be too harsh, but why have options if you're just going to keep telling us we made the wrong choice? Just write a story instead of a CYOA.

If you're going to throw choices in make them actual choices, not force people to choose something then say "good choice".
This is chooseyourstory not forceyourstory.

"You sigh, relieved to have found your doggy and glad she is growing into such a mature, independent young woman. You turn and continue walking to your house. "

I honestly don't know how to add a constructive comment after reading this... so the doggy mutated into a human woman? @@

Really well written and enjoyable

Haha, this was entertaining. I loved it, but sometimes the pages could lack description. Nicely done!

Linear storyline, not enough choices (i.e. virtually none, I think) to be considered a real CYOA. Average writing.

I'd say the writing itself is above average and hi may have done the impossible here and made a 'lol random' plot actually amusing, but this is incredibly linear and tonally just so strange.

You didn't have any tags on it, but I was reading it as some sort of whimsical children's thing what with the talking pigeons and all, right up until the moat full of syringes and AIDS out of nowhere. It's disappointing too that every one of the choices amount to 'no, that's wrong' and funnel you right back to the single correct path. The eagle/hawk 'choices' in the very beginning are the most glaring examples of what's to come.

This was entertaining enough for what it was though and I definitely think you have the skill to write something more substantial if you choose to, so looking forward to any further work from you.