Player Comments on The House on Maple Hill
I certainly think there could have been more added to the story and it was kind of corny at times it was interesting enough for the amount of time it took me to read it.
Also the whole haunted house idea while cliched is presented well enough in this case to make it interesting.
I wish there was more time to build up to the creepy in this case, since the horror would have benefitted more from it. Other than length and branching the quality of writing was good and this story has potential.
on 1/23/2022 9:15:08 PM with a score of 0
Well, I liked the game, not as much as I could have liked it, but hey, nothing's perfect, not even this review. First of all, the game isn't too drawn out, but neither is it too short to get any enjoyment our of it. The grammar is ok, but English is probably not your native language since I've a few grammatical and punctuation mistakes here and there, but nothing to affect the story too much, however, that does not mean they were not annoying. The characters could have used better descriptions, for example, what were their exact relationships with our main character? The premise... well, I hate to say it, but it's a bit cliche with the friends going to the haunted house to find the monster from the legends there ready to kill them all.
1) As I have said, the game is of a good length, being neither too long and drawn out to be boring or TOO short to be of any enjoyment, which is something that quite a few writers on this site don't get when making a story. I'm not saying that short or very long stories can't be good. For a good short story look at Snow, and for a good lengthy story look anything Endmaster made and you'll see that it isn't impossible. However, many writers are either too lazy to write stories of any significant length, cram too much info and make the story too long and boring to read, or simply over-extend themselves when trying to make a long story... on short, good job with getting the length of it just right!
2)The grammar is one of the few problems I've seen here. There were a few grammatical and punctuation marks that I've seen and considered quite annoying as they sometimes killed the mood that the story was trying to set up. However, it wasn't so bad that it got too annoying to read throughout the story.
3)The description were overall done good, however, I really wished to know what was the exact relationship of these characters with our own character, I mean, yes, they were his best friends and they're delinquents and the character SEEMS to care of their opinion, but that's pretty much the end of it all. I know this is bit nitpicky and it might not bother everyone, but I did find it a bit bothersome as I played the story
3) And finally, the premise! As I have already said, I have found it a bit cliche and somewhat predictable and I'm not sure I could expand on what I have already said, but it felt that I have read a slight variation on all the short horror stories I have read until now. To be honest, this was the thing that bothered me the most, really...
Well, the story in itself is enjoyable, there are a few grammar and punctuation mistakes, but it's nothing too jarring or distracting from the actual story, the characters themselves were ok, but they needed to be expanded on just a bit and finally, I will say it for a third time(because why the hell not?), the story is a bit cliche.
However, it's been a good ride and I enjoyed playing the game(even if I haven't gotten the good ending) and while it could have been improved it's been a good ride. And now, I rate this game a 5/8 and hope that people won't call me out for having shit taste... either way, good job!
on 3/3/2017 3:22:55 PM with a score of 0
Fun. I think it deserves a higher rating based on the storyline. Grammatical errors and incorrect spelling (e.g.: do instead of due) make some areas difficult to understand.
on 12/23/2016 4:18:43 PM with a score of 0
The story is a good length. I liked how you made every scene in fine detail. From making a decision to go with the group, to having butterflies. I noticed somethings that was filtered.
on 12/8/2016 11:37:55 PM with a score of 0
Everything runs smoothly in this story. I was wondering what the backstory of the monster was? I would go through and make sure the tenses are all the same, cos I saw a few mistakes. I liked the characters and setting too.
on 11/18/2016 6:05:10 PM with a score of 0
decent story with very few spelling or grammar errors. My main complain is that it is to short. My minor complain is the lack of detail in describing the "beast", but that could have been your intent as it plays up some of the mystery.
on 11/18/2016 3:05:29 PM with a score of 0
Ive played expensive video games that were not as well written or as exciting. i especially liked the fact that there are more bloody bad endings than rainbows and unicorns. Very realistic! Great Job!
— Paul Comolli on 11/18/2016 2:42:46 AM with a score of 0
I loved it!! It gave me chills when I read the story. I could picture everything in great detail. Great job!!
— Mary on 11/18/2016 2:21:15 AM with a score of 0
Good. I didn't see any grammar issues but why is this unpublished? it seems finished unless you are planning on adding more routes.
on 11/15/2016 6:06:15 PM with a score of 0