Player Comments on The Mystery of the Mysterious Time Machine

It was good but too short

That obviously had a high nostalgia value for you, which seeps through into the appearance of each page. Nice, quick and relatively simple story, just like it said on the packet.

Great job! I finished it in a relatively quick time but it was so detailed and thought out. Props to you!

I am very happy wit hmy cavemen bros

5/8

I really liked the amount of options you had and that you also included the handwritten notes when you originally wrote it.

It was kind of mysterious

I enjoyed the integration of the notes you wrote as a kid into the story, that lends the story a homemade feel. It was really adorable, and that was a nice touch.

I’d also like to commend you for 14 years on the site, that’s really impressive.

I enjoyed the hand-made quality of the story, and I liked the branching. And for an 11 year old this was really impressive. Thank you for this story, I thought it was really cool.

Obviously, the writing could use some work, but I think you already know that. The passion for writing is obvious though, and for that, well done!

This story feels quaint and endearing. The inclusion of images from the notebook it was originally written in is a nice touch, and there’s a nostalgic feel added with the page numbers added in the links. Even the name has a childlike charm.
Your handwriting was awful, though.
Since you wrote this a long time ago, there’s not really any point in telling you how you could improve the writing; part of the story’s appeal is that you’ve copied it down exactly how it once was.
Not bad writing at all for a child; a decent length, too. And don’t worry, we’re all nerds here.