Player Comments on Vermin

Glad to see more people attempting CYOAs for this!

I had trouble figuring out exactly what rhyme scheme you were using, it seemed to jump around a lot. The flow was kind of rough in places but there's a lot of imagery here, and it's a good length with quite a few choices.

How 'inspired' by the French Revolution was this? If it's meant to be purely historical it might raise a few eyebrows, this view of it makes it sound like it was entirely dirty evil poor people slaughtering the good and the innocent, and kind of glosses over the amount of suffering people went through in the years prior to that that made them get to the breaking point in the first place...

This reminded me a lot of Oranges graveyard story if anyone wants to check his piece out.While the rhyming was great, I couldn’t exactly keep up with the story.Im guessing you needed to now a bit about the French’s history to actually connect with this.I also couldn’t really grasp the entire story, since you made the rhymes pretty complex, with the reader rushing through the story.Im trying to figure out the story since I’m a bit stupid when it comes to ‘complex writings that rhyme where you need to know french history’ if that makes any possible sense.
I’m just gonna go long shot with my rusty rifle and ask for a translation sheet since I had no idea about what the smack this was.Other than hanging of people who were labelled vermin, which happened so much the graveyards become to small.5/8 for the amount of time you possibly needed to figure out rhymes and make it sound pretty professional

This was a fun and entertaining quick read.

Interesting, yet a bit short I say. Perhaps more can be added another day.

If this becomes a full story, that will be interesting to see. On that day, I would be filled with glee.

More rhymes would be nice. I would suggest, multiply it thrice!

This was pretty fascinating. I certainly enjoyed reading this :)