Player Comments on Wars of earth: advance of Rome

If I am not mistaken, Sparta didn't have a palace.

The game is realy rushed. In a few short pages you concore the world with little explanation on why you do most things. For example in the middle of taking over China, you take over Africa, (which whould already be under Romeo contole because it's closer.) Also the war on India is "to short to mention." Realy could use a lot more detail, and story, but on the bright side the spelling was very good.

to short.

Good

There are many questions I have about this story.
Why did I die invading china?
Why did I die picking another legion?
I have about 25 questions which need solving, you should've put twice as much effort into this.

Way too short, and an undeveloped plot.

lots of potential. maybe if you got a coauthor who would make your story more in depth and write a story to go along with the character send me a message if your interested.

Not very developed but this has potential.

Rather illogical and needs more paragraphing. Its not goo bad,but could have been much better

How do you figure that Roman world domination = cessation of technological advancement?

Wait a second... How did the Spartans get hold of the technology to make a bomb?

I just clicked 3 links and I'm done. Not so much for a story, isn't it?

You might want to change how you organize your thoughts, like describing yourself in a separate paragraph, and so on.

Pretty good mate, maybe this short story was just to test the waters? but it was actually quite a goodun, extend it and make it more in depth and you're on to a winner.