Time Travel Shenanigans and More

Have a nice awkward talk with your boyfriend in the hospital.

It's written using mostly dialogue.There are a total of six "official endings". One tip to find all six of them is this: Never press the go back button. The game will remember things you've done in the past.  

Thank you Endmaster for giving me permission to publish this. Here's the Link to that lovely little Convo. Remnants of the old title are seen in the cover.

Also the contest entry to the Endmaster's second prompt Contest

A Story about Necromancers

Anastovok, the city of the undead and the sole refuge of necromancers, has ended its campaign as its victor along with four other cities in its alliance. However, some unforeseen circumstances will push the city and its inhabitants to its limits. Will it spell doom for the fledgling empire or bring the beginning of a new age?

Prompt 5) A story about a society on the verge of a Golden Age experiencing a cataclysmic disaster.

Part of Endmaster's 2024 prompt contest.

Romancing a Werewolf Has Never Been This Family Friendly!

Since there were no little girls left to be sacrificed to the great wolf, the young lad Rufi was sent instead. However, he will not be killed this quickly as he vows to kill the wolf with his own two hands in order to avenge his sister and the other girls.

A spin of the classical tale of Red Riding Hood and inspired by the CYS romance corner and Bucky's contest prompt. "Breathe fresh live into the tale of Little Red Riding Hood." It's written in the cave-of-time style. "It's a Boy" contains a total of 19 endings, good luck finding them all! 

Extra warning: The assigned 7/8 maturity rating was not a mistake. Be warned of some very explicit scenes. Go in with caution. 

Running a Potion Shop Has Never Been This Exciting!

The country of Riverrock had just discovered a brand new continent called Foundland. Settlers and hopeful souls flock to the promised land. One of them is the young mage Lise and her accomplished teacher. They set up a potion shop, build a house and decorated half of it. All things were fine and dandy till her teacher decided to fuck off and go on his own adventure. Now she has to run it on her own. 

This story is basically a mix between soothing slice-of-life activities,attempts at comedy and dark undertones. It will have two main endings and five side-endings. (for people who have trouble finding the mini arcs, please select this white space: herbs, study, potion, entrance.) More mini-arcs and extra content will soon be added. If you have any trouble getting a particular ending, feel free to message me. 

Entry for Endmaster's manifest destiny contest. 

What Happens When You Have Only This Many Minutes Left

A short story following the last king's final decision in a land on the cusp of the industrial revolution. There are 4 endings in total.

Submission for Corgi's Lord of the lands contest, a product of my sleep deprived mind and fever dreams

Edit: extra drawings added one extra proofread 

Going To Your Backwards Breeding Hometown Has Never Been This Interesting!

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Dear young master,

You might not be bothered to read this letter as I'm very aware of your bullheaded character. Nevertheless, I've come to inform you that a dreadful curse has been placed in Winslow. Beasts of inscrutable sizes roam its streets. Even your father couldn't fight it as he had succumbed to this illness. Although your opinions might differ on this matter, Nikolai Percival had been a kind man of great character. His passing had shocked the entire village to their bones. The people are scared, lost what to do. I am aware that you expressed no intention into taking up your father's mantle, but the village needs a new leader, a new duke. I plead to you to at least finish his affairs before making any lasting decisions.

(....)

Oh help us all, the mother's milk, I hear the voices sing to me, the elder gods, their song. 

-Eduard Merrill

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Play as a prickly prick and discover the grimy seaside town of Winslow. Similar to "little mage's potion shop", it's an open world setting with multiple locations to explore and puzzles to solve. There are a total of three endings! Guide and map included. 

(and yes, this was supposed to be the fishing story contest entry till I forgot that I was bad at copypasting and linking pages together.)

Fun fact: this storygame has 457 pages and 980 links. According to the site it's about average.

Edit June 11th: fixed the links of the light house, baker and beach area 

Me learning to script! Woohoo!

I vote for B.

Not because B was a masterpiece, but because the other two were worse. I'll edit it later to include my rant about each of them.

Story A

I think all the stories suffer a bit under the weight of authors not often writing in the scifi genre, but story A did have the most struggle in dispensing the world building to the readers in a natural way. Well, basically story starts immediately with a big infodump after one small paragraph, which was actually very unnecessary. (The first and third paragraphs give the readers enough clues that they could kinda guess that it is a new colony)
 
It took me a till almost the ending of the story to even guess what the plot of should be, even though this info should have been in the first paragraphs. (For example, the existence of the bioweapon, it being lost and her relationship with Pietro could have been mentioned in the beginning of the story. She could've set some pictures of cats during her journey and lamented to him that they still haven't recovered the bioweapon.)

Then we have some environment description which were actually well written, especially when you incorporate it with comments that tell us more about who sage is. "The lab coat, she didn't have time to change etc." However, ehh, what is Sage's job exactly? What is Pietro's job? Why did Pietro keep it out in the open in the room? Is he an idiot? 

Story B 
I think it's a fun pulpy story. I like that the monsters are fungi thingies and that they were fighting in a jungle (nice change from all the desert planets). Whilst I don't mind the story, I just think the writing has some small kinks. The sentences did feel a bit disjointed, very staccato like. There were times where I just was wondering why you couldn't just use "he" in some paragraphs instead of spamming Carl everywhere. (Paragraph 7 and 8 for example)
I also don't feel that you took advantage of the jungle setting enough. I expected them complaining about the lack of visibility, the humid weather making it difficult to breathe, the shitty plants tangling on your shirt, lots of sweat etc.
And again, a whole action story with the protagonist ending up dead is a bit sad.

Story C 
You should be your greatest advocate of your writing, because no one else is gonna do it for you. This warning in the beginning of your story is just kinda weak of ya. 

The main difference between John and Bob is that Bob is equipped with a shotgun and a small fluffy dog.

Eos contemplated divorce after he said that dumb line.

There are already two entries available (it started on May 3th). I think this also might interest thise who have a shorter attention span and are planning to read dracula one day. Since Dracula is written in an epistolary fashion, one guy came up with the idea to send snippets of the book to one's mail corresponding with the date it was written. 

I missed out the previous year, but decided to join this time. If there is enough interest, then this thread will also function as a discussion board.

If you subscribe Here you can get a snippet in your mailbox! It's all free.

(Light spoiler: Jonathan Harker does have a great fondness of paprika.)

Please don't

He also mentioned you bruh

Dear God, why am I included in this? Just call everyone diseases and be done with it.  

I didn't know you were that popular 

I pronounce it as:

Mii (the I of Wii) - Zahl. (The a of ball)

The second one repeats certain details multiple times: "nobody knows what his face looks like." And "but nobody knows where comes from."

Yeah, even though it is a description, try to make things a little more dynamic. Actions and stuff tell me more what he is like than a trait like "friendly".

What kind of things does he do that are friendly? Does he strike up conversations with strangers? Does he always speak very politely or does he crack jokes with multiple swears?

Take care to mention body language. How does he walk, how does he talk, how does he stand, how does eat? 

With objects; how does he treat them? Yeah, a foreign looking sword tells me not a lot. What kind of relationship does he have with it? Do you see him polish the blade often or does he likes to show it off and parade around with it? Does he hide it discreetly under his cloak? All these actions indicate multiple things: how valuable is it, how attached is he to this sword, does he want to sell it etc ? You can do the same stuff with the lute.

With clothes, general rule is; does it add to the character. Things like color can easily be left out for example if it doesn't give me any hints of his personality. Look, if the bard was very girly and cares about fashion, I would give more lavish descriptions about the meticulous fit and matching pink colors. Here, the green, black and white doesn't tell me anything and are therefore redundant. In my opinion, I would focus a lot on the robe that hides his face (you want him to look foreboding right) and leave out his clothes or keep it very very brief: such as; wears plain clothing. 

In short: the goal of a description is to tell me the vibe of the character. If I still don't know the overall personality and/or demeanor of the character after reading it, then the description might not be so effective.

EXCEPTIONS DO ALWAYS EXIST THO.

If the description is told from the pov of another character who is an unreliable narrator, then the focus could also be more about what the POV character THINKS of this person in question and their overall worldview.