Player Comments on A Pleasant Shopping Trip
Uh... so I go shopping happily and then there's a killing, murder, and after returning home, getting leeched by a strange jacket or ended up possessed and over-ride by some cult leader guy? Is there 'A' good ending for Alex?
on 11/14/2017 1:26:07 AM with a score of 0
So the good ending is basically you taking over you from an alternate dimension? Since, Garth calls you a clone he might have came from that dimension(There's you from that dimension and you from this dimension. As you can see yourself experiencing a birthday party that day instead of the murderous gang stuff that day.
-- RANDOM USER ( USELESS STUFF) on 11/13/2017 4:35:23 PM with a score of 0
I didn’t really enjoy it. It was too... how do I put this? Monosexual. There was too many feminine type scenarios and trains of thought. The plot was decent. I know it is hard to create stories with sexual choices, but if you did, it would really add something to the story. I know I sound sexist for saying this, but too many stories are just for guys or vice versa. There are some awesome instructions for how to do this on the site.
And the other problem was that it had a lot of cheesy-Hollywood teenage drama. It was just hard to emotionally attach to like some other stories.
There was very little grammatical errors, which was good. And that, in and of itself, is a great feat.
But in many ways, it wasn’t realistic. It had some strange and awkward situations that where confusing. It doesn’t make sense to start shopping and end up a martyr to save people from being blown up.
on 11/8/2017 4:28:25 PM with a score of 0
Perhaps it was explained but only in the epilogue that I couldn't see due to the bug.
on 10/7/2017 1:48:42 AM with a score of 0
Really great story. It has a great plot and keeps you hooked to the end. I was going to rate 6/8, but there's a bug in the ending where you kill Sandi and use her syringe to kill Gorth. After the dream sequence, the link to proceed takes you to a page with Mike's birthday party, and it's as if nothing had happened. It showed Sandi alive and said that I don't know Ivy. I suspect this is the epilogue for another ending, but I really wanted to know what actually happened in the aftermath, so I had to subtract 1 from my rating.
Beyond that, it's never really explained how they forced people to randomly wear a jacket and why the police, who have guns, weren't able to stop some guys with knives.
on 10/7/2017 1:46:27 AM with a score of 0
Remind me of Liber Primus...
on 10/1/2017 6:59:35 AM with a score of 0
This reminded me of the Simon Pegg film "The World's End. It's kind of trippy, but the good kind. The characters are pretty eccentric and colorful. Fun read.
on 9/23/2017 6:28:42 AM with a score of 0
This was a fun read. The story is interesting, your writing is good, there are no bugs except the one End already found.
One thing I found interesting is that Gorth's group called us clones, yet they seemed to behave more like clones than we do. Try to get a bunch of humans to agree on something, and you're likely to fail. While a majority might folow a leader, there will always be people who won't. The aliens all folowed Gorth and did the exact same things, without question. Or maybe there are some who didn't agree with Gorth and I just don't know about them.
I wish there would've been an ending where I asked Gorth about how his people are less of clones than ours are. Or maybe just walk up to a random person and ask him how he's different from his brothers. I would've died, of course, but the answer might be interesting. Mayana, you're overthinking this, don't post this ... too late.
on 9/21/2017 2:37:21 PM with a score of 0
even better than Reesees
on 9/15/2017 10:13:03 PM with a score of 0
A very pleasant shopping trip indeed! Worth all the clicks! ;)
on 9/15/2017 8:23:00 PM with a score of 0