Mayana, The Apprentice Scrivener

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3/13/2018 9:58 AM

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104 wins / 113 losses





I'm a blind teenager from Slovenia. Most of my time here is spent reading stories or writing stupid things on the forums, but I sometimes write short stories and poems as well. English isn't my first language, so any feedback is welcome! Up for a duel anytime.
Have a nice day, Mayana.

Here's the list of my 10 favorite stories, in no particular order:
  • Homo Perfectus,
  • Suzy's Strange Saga,
  • Through time,
  • Death Song,
  • Dead Man Walking (Zombie Survival),
  • The Other World,
  • The Devil's Fire,
  • Dungeon Stompage,
  • Achilles,
  • The Secret of Daphne.

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Grammatical issue with past/present tense on 3/12/2018 4:20:12 PM
"The city has always been a den of thieves" is Present Perfect Simple. By saying that, you already tell us that it still is one, so adding that would be redundand. Of course, I suck at this thing called English, so I might be wrong. But for example, if you say "They have been living here since 1992" (Present Perfect Continuous), it is clear that they still do. If you however say "She has already done her homework" (another example of Simple) that means that she isn't doing it anymore.

Grammatical issue with past/present tense on 3/12/2018 4:08:17 PM
The city has always been full of drug dealers.

Grammatical issue with past/present tense on 3/12/2018 4:04:58 PM
I think that you'll just have to follow the grammar rules over what your brain is telling you here. Something that might make it easier is showing more. For example, instead of just saying it's a bustling metropolis, describe the many merchants, yelling at the top of their voice to be heard over the noise of the crowd. Or perhaps show us how a man bumps into a woman, sending her bags flying from her hands. He doesn't even notice however and is swallowed by the crowd once more, leaving her to pick the vegetables from the bricks on the ground. I just gave you 2 brief descriptions of situations without any imagery and my examples were probably not the best, but I hope you get the point. If you talk about some event that is clearly happening now, that should make it harder for you to switch to the past. Remember that when you describe the city, the protagonist is actually there, seeing it with their own eyes, unless the city is from a memory.

Contest SHAME 6: It’s Bitch SHAMING Time! on 3/11/2018 7:38:10 AM
Alright, seems End removed Chris from the list. Now I can insult everyone on that list without being mean to someone who's innocent. You're all a bunch of lazy faggots. Either enter a contest and publish something, or don't enter at all. Even Digit managed to submit something, he's better than all of you!

Contest SHAME 6: It’s Bitch SHAMING Time! on 3/11/2018 5:45:35 AM
Why is Chris on the list?

Romance Contest Winner on 3/11/2018 5:31:15 AM
I'm proud of you Ebon. Sure, you had to cut some corners due to procrastination, but we won! Well, you. Now just take a short break and get some sleep, you deserve it.

EndMaster’s Romance Story Contest on 3/10/2018 3:39:51 PM
Hey, I wasn't that mean! Sure, I did call his story awful a few times, but it was always as a joke. And usually when I was complaining about mistakes in the chat it wasn't me hating him, just being like "Lol you wrote something stupid. Get more sleep.". I wasn't serious when insulting him, so I'm tecnicly still nice, right? :) Ebon's story is actually very good (at least now when I fixed it).

Red Elk I (an interactive story) on 3/9/2018 3:20:39 PM
D. Continue asking questions, to get as much information as possible. Learn what happened, who did it and how can you fix it. And ffs, load that rifle if you have any ammo with you. Oh whoops, I just wasted the choice that the others might use for fucking corpses. Can't help it, I'm boring and reasonable. But if it's 2042, then shouldn't everything be much more aged than it is? The houses would probably be in disrepair and most of the bones would've fallen apart as well.

Game ideas? on 3/9/2018 6:54:02 AM
Ah yes, the clasic "My brother did it" excuse. I'm sure everyone's going to believe you. :)

Red Elk I (an interactive story) on 3/8/2018 10:31:01 AM
C. As much as some people here might want to chose the option with sex, it could possibly lead to a early death. His name is Kilroy. Kill-roy. He might be the one that's responsible for all this and I don't trust him at all. But let's not kil him yet, because I might be wrong. If there was a write in option I'd probably make d "Just ask him questions normaly, so he doesn't think you suspect anything". But oh well, an interrogation it is.