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Player Rating3.89/8

"Too few ratings to be ranked"
based on 47 ratings since 11/12/2016
played 252 times (finished 33)

Story Difficulty2/8

"walk in the park"

Play Length4/8

"A well spent lunch break"

Maturity Level4/8

"need to be accompanied by an adult"
Contains content that may not be suitable for persons under age 13. If this were a movie, it would probably be PG.

Tags

Drama

Your life is definitely going downhill... The bullies at school are getting meaner and meaner, your friends are all chasing after girls, and you can't even think straight woth your teachers yelling at you for having C's. Your wise math teacher helps you break out of your funk...

Player Comments

A great short story!
-- Chickdove on 3/20/2017 4:11:37 PM with a score of 0
I like the moral behind all of this, and I liked that it was all because of the m554 tea4455 ( numbers block off spoilers )
-- Doodler623 on 1/10/2017 10:23:01 PM with a score of 0
Great story!
-- Voltage on 11/15/2016 8:33:32 PM with a score of 0
There were quite a number of spelling and grammar mistakes. The story itself was pretty good. I can tell you are improving so keep it up.
-- BigRonn77 on 11/15/2016 1:47:27 PM with a score of 0
Cute and well written, but the math is off.
-- betaband on 11/12/2016 12:23:09 AM with a score of 0
Will already said it, but your writing has improved noticeably since you started here. I'm still spotting typos, so closer proofreading is needed (put your brother to work), and you still have the issues with your dialogue tags, but this was a fun little story with a point and a plot. A good addition to the School Based category where those things can be kind of rare.
-- mizal on 11/11/2016 9:46:09 AM with a score of 0
I must say that I rather enjoyed this.

Fantastic job, MinnieKing! ^^
-- TharaApples on 11/10/2016 11:33:45 PM with a score of 0
Ah brothers, our sole purpose in life is to annoy our sisters :D Your writing is definitely getting better: this was a very good story and a good moral tale though I'm not certain that winning a talent show is a cure for bullying (I rather imagine it would intensify out of jealousy) but this is good. You are producing a lot of stories lately and they are getting better all the time so I'm looking forward to seeing your next story :)
-- Will11 on 11/10/2016 9:47:34 PM with a score of 0
it was really good
-- Daniel White on 11/10/2016 9:40:35 PM with a score of 0
Everyone let me clarify: The comment by "GhostBusters" is a fake comment written by my brother from one of my devices. Please understand that this was not me, and I would never write a fake message. I checked the history on my device, and found he is the one who wrote a comment on my story called "Conned" as someone named "Guest."
-- MinnieKing on 11/10/2016 4:03:05 PM with a score of 0
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