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Player Rating4.15/8

"#288 overall, #17 for 2016"
based on 101 ratings since 11/12/2016
played 921 times (finished 118)

Story Difficulty2/8

"walk in the park"

Play Length4/8

"A well spent lunch break"

Maturity Level4/8

"need to be accompanied by an adult"
Contains content that may not be suitable for persons under age 13. If this were a movie, it would probably be PG.

Tags

Drama

Your life is definitely going downhill... The bullies at school are getting meaner and meaner, your friends are all chasing after girls, and you can't even think straight woth your teachers yelling at you for having C's. Your wise math teacher helps you break out of your funk...

Player Comments

Interesting setup for this story. It sounds like it will be fun: but that was sure a rough start! I like the descriptions on the first page – they are a little factual, but since the story is first person, that makes sense. I like that I’ve got clear choices on the first page. It was pretty clear that one option wasn’t going to work. I’m not sure the other options are actually much of a choice, though. I like that there are different choices, but did they have any effect on the story? It appears that no matter which choice I take, I still end up in 6th period with no differences.

I’m not against choices that eventually lead back to a bottleneck, but those are much more effective when the paths that lead back to the bottleneck have an effect. In this case, for example, running to the teacher might get your backpack back, and that gives you an additional option when you’re in math class or something like that. That appears to happen again with the teacher, but maybe there’s effects that I just can’t see going on.

I did like the various options and places the story took me. I liked the different settings and physical places to go, too. There were a number of dead-ends, but that’s good because many of them were at least a little obvious, too. Very well done!
-- Ogre11 on 5/11/2018 1:27:13 PM with a score of 0
The game feels that no matter what you pick it has the same ending, for example you will win the talent show and you have to go to the gym after going to ice cream shop and the park.
-- godiegoh on 4/12/2018 4:45:26 PM with a score of 0
Absolutely wonderful. A great message and fun to play.
-- Mama on 4/12/2018 11:20:23 AM with a score of 0
:) This is truly inspirational, a wonderful message. It is awesome. This should get 8 because it is enlightening.
-- HowdyHiHello on 4/12/2018 12:54:24 AM with a score of 0
This was awsome I got the best ending
I totally "never" had to restart to get it. ;)
-- Unkindcrab on 4/7/2018 7:37:57 PM with a score of 0
This is so AMAZING! I got the best ending on my first try. Anyways, this story has a lot of creativity and inspiration. Thank you SO much for making this.

But now I'm going to talk about the stuff you should approve. I like how there's at least 2 choices per page. But you should make the story slightly longer. That would make so many other people rate this highly. Apart from that, no grammar mistakes I can spot and a unique story. ^_^
7/8
-- LukeDaNoob on 4/5/2018 2:35:22 PM with a score of 0
This is really good
-- APieceOfBread on 4/4/2018 7:39:13 PM with a score of 0
This was downright inspirational, not saying I’m deppressed or anything, but the message of this was clear’things get worse before they get better.’
While it may sound depressing as hell,(Which I Thought At First)
you need to put a positive spin on it and be positive, cause people normally focus on the negative.

This wasn’t like a long story with op description or amazing item use, but it hit its mark and used something a lot of story’s don’t have.The message.It seems the whole point of this story was to put a positive message to anyone out there willing to take a peek.

I find it interesting how you did it for I’m guessing that reason only, admirable really,Especially if we have a depressed guy who’s down on his luck drinking imaginary beer and scrolling this site to take his mind off his problems.

An interesting way to send a message other than a spammy forum chat,5/8 for the message and the messenger?(I’m pretty sure that’s a quote)
-- Mistery on 3/10/2018 1:20:45 AM with a score of 0
Short but worth it... 8/8 :)
-- Creepyguy735 on 12/28/2017 11:27:39 PM with a score of 0
this book was really funny and easy to read.
-- Linda on 12/5/2017 3:11:14 AM with a score of 0
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