Making Bacon Pancakes

Player Rating3.49/8

"#408 overall, #17 for 2016"
based on 107 ratings since 04/16/2016
played 599 times (finished 122)

Story Difficulty3/8

"trek through the forest"

Play Length3/8

"A nice jog down the driveway"

Maturity Level4/8

"need to be accompanied by an adult"
Contains content that may not be suitable for persons under age 13. If this were a movie, it would probably be PG.

Tags

Humor

One morning, you wake up and decide to have pancakes. Why? Because it's Saturday, and you want something with syrup. But what you don't know is that there are many things to overcome before you get to sink your teeth into this heavenly morning meal. 

Try for three possible endings.

This game is meant to be a quick, bite-sized game if you want a little game to freshen up your morning. Now, get to pancaking!

Player Comments

Look, I'm going to be honest, the 'wake up in the morning and meander around while random things happen' genre is tied right up there with the wolf sims for me as far as stories I absolutely detest go. The writing was actually really decent in this one so you get a pass, I'm just hoping you focus on something with a little more plot to it next time, because you do have the talent for it.
-- mizal on 4/16/2016 11:36:43 PM
Not bad for a story of the Random-stuff-happens genre and interestingly it seemed to take itself a bit more seriously than most of these :) Your writing style is good but I'd suggest a stronger plot or hook to draw the reader in if you want to move your stories up out of the 5-minutes-of-mildly-amusing-distraction category :D This fell in the not bad but not great area 4/8 area for me :)
In these stories humor is key so if you feel tempted to write another story like this again one thing you might want to do is brainstorm or gather from various sources (which when I do it for my stories I like to think of as research not plagarism...) a long list of jokes, one-liners or funny choices and get as many into the story as possible. :)
-- Will11 on 4/16/2016 6:15:59 PM
Great adventure!!!
-- Seth on 2/16/2018 4:09:39 PM
This is very illogical and short. It made my day worse and not better.
-- Jreesebot on 2/16/2018 2:29:47 PM
dude, this is the best thing i have ever seen, *hulk smashes through the door*
-- nick on 2/14/2018 2:21:35 PM
How does a butter knife cut you?
-- pygmypuff on 2/4/2018 11:35:46 AM
I'm just going to get right into it...
First, I don't wear a watch, but I don't think it would be so comfy to sleep with it on. Second, I wouldn't sprint across my small kitchen just to grab a knife. I also stab my hand with it, but instead of thinking, "Crap, my hand!" I think, "Crap, my blood is getting into the pancakes!" Also, when the guy breaks into my house, I throw a butter knife at him? Yeah, that will definitely make him leave! No. When I wake up in the hospital it has no mention about the fire, the cut hand from an extremely sharp butter knife, or the man who broke into my home. One ending gives me a nurse saying, "We found your pancake batter, and it tasted great!" First of all, who eats pancake batter while saving a life, and second of all, it was filled my blood! Why would she eat that?! Another thing is when my house is burning down, and I stay inside the house. Who needs to evacuate? And when the firefighters show up, they can clearly see the house burning down behind me, yet they still ask, "Where's the fire?"
Overall, while trying to make it fun you just made it completely illogical and I didn't enjoy it because I am a person who likes things that make sense.
If you tried to make it better, and did, it would have a much higher rating.
-- parislover on 1/11/2018 5:19:24 PM
stay the hell away from this game...
-- Saint_999 on 9/27/2017 7:37:11 AM
Yeah, i'll be honest, this is one of those lolrandom stories that make me hate myself when I actually find them funny.

I thought the plot needed a lot of work, since it's quite boring, or at least in my opinion. The writing was ok, but the situations made it feel like a kid wrote it.

Despite me disliking the plot in general, I did enjoy this to kill a few minutes, but I feel like that was also the amount of time spent writing this very short story.

I'll just make a quick list of what this story needs.
-More Detail
-Better Plot Development
-More Character Development
-Less randomness

I'll give this a 3/8.
-- MinnieKing on 3/12/2017 7:57:03 PM
Fine enough...

Entertained me enough to make me hungry for breakfast.

Your grammar is "perfecto", and the randomness was done in a humorous way that I like.

In short, pretty good. 5/8.
-- AgentX on 2/22/2017 8:23:52 AM
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