Player Comments on My usual week

I wouldn't call this an CYOA though, as you have very limited options on what to do every turn, for example, you can snooze and snooze and snooze, but eventually you'll still have to go to school anyway, if would've been better if you could make options that drastically change the plot, rather than minor choices that add nothing to the overall game.

Plot issues aside, some of the endings haven't been completed yet, as if you were too lazy to make something worthwhile of killing time. The only redeeming factor of the adventure is no grammar mistakes, other than that, it's just boring.

If this was a product of laziness then I suggest taking down this story so others can play more seriously crafted adventures, instead of just wasting time on a poorly made unfinished product.

I would recommend making more choices, adding more detail, finish the pages, and add a plot-line. Try and write something to draw the reader in and want to play it again and again. Make the reader feel like they are the character with amazing details, even if they're tiny ones. Plot is something every story and every game needs to be interesting. Good luck!

BOOOOOORINNNNG!
Nothing to do. I like history and computers, NOOB. What's the point?

so basically im living some other dudes life and it's just like normal? no excitement, adventure, action... nothing? wow. sweet.

Pretty good!

The grammar and spelling was all good :) Although, at the end of the story/ near the end, the option to play Minecraft with your brother leads to two other options. If click the link to watch T.V with him, there's nothing written on it. I'd suggest unpublishing this, and fixing that issue. But apart from that, it was alright. 4/8

Soooooooooo boring I could fall asleeeep ??

Very good, really boring though.

The author warned us it was boring. Warning verified.

I agree though; if you yourself know it is boring why don't you change it?

There are so many pages that only have one link. I would recommend fixing that. And it really wasn't that good.

Yeah... Life simulator 2014. That is my life... Except I don't have a brother and I don't ride a bus and I don't really walk my dogs because we have a huge yard they run around in. Anyway it was, well, life. Also, I read your comment on this game, and if you think the game is awful, why not take it down and make it a bit more interesting? Be a bit more descriptive, make more than one ending, etc.

fun :D

An ok game but you did have a page that was not finished which is why I gave a 4 for this one but an ok game otherwise.

Well there's a few minutes out of my life I'll never get back :)

Wow. Must suck to be you haha -oh wait my life isn't much better-

it was good was I a girl or boy

Okay everyone I know, i was lazy when I made this. But I'll make a better one next time and that'll be an actual week. I didn't actually know why I published this so soon, i just was soo lazy. I'll try and make a better one next time.

Very lacking. I got to a point and I could not continue. You can't just make an incomplete game. Plus, many spelling and grammar errors. It wasn't enjoyable either. 1/8

Bloody hell. Boring.

Okay, first of all, this was not a finished story. One of your pages was blank and I had to go back. Second, the grammar was very bad. If you needed someone to test the story for you, you could of just asked on the forums. Lastly, the story isn't great either.

I would highly recommend that you work on punctuation. I know that commas can be a pain in the butt, but there are a lot of spots in your game that could honestly benefit from them. Aside from that, this is a very mundane and uninteresting concept you're describing. A lot of people on this site have to essentially live this story. People come to this site to get away from their lives for a little bit, and, naturally, they don't want to play something that reminds them of everyday, mundane things. Of course, for your first game, it isn't too terribly awful.

Oh, I've gone hatin'.

A general lack of plot/grammar/characters/intelligence/setting was/were the main problem(s)

You could really put more description in your story, as a reader I couldn't get much of a picture of the characters or settings. Also, this story played over a day, not a week as the title suggests. Besides the fact that this is boring and has no plot, the writing could use some work.

That was nice, but... Wait, you stay up all night playing Minecraft, when you know you have school? Wow. Good luck!