Player Comments on The Court

This storygame was very... interesting. It reminded me very much of a dream, so much in fact that at some point I thought I might actually be dreaming. Most of the story I didn't understand anything, and it seemed like it was just dangling the answers it front of me for fun. When I got to the point where answers started showing up, I just thought, “Well that explains a lot,”. Eventually I came to the conclusion that this universe belongs to Zaren, who is a madman, and he can change reality. I thought maybe there was some way to overthrow his “government”. Again, very interesting. 5/8

Well, apart from a few typing/grammatical errors, it has a wonderful premise and some good descriptions. I find it intriguing, so I hope to see more of it. I'm also curious if you do go further, if you will use the advanced mode and have the weapon choices account for something.

An extremely engaging story, alive with wonderful detail, interesting characters, and foreboding atmosphere. It feels like a mix of Changeling and Twilight Zone with a childish and petty god (or is it Azathoth even?) in need of a sound walloping. The only real drawback in it all of course, is that it is unfinished. Completed, I would likely rate it among the highest and best of the entire site.

Id disagree with the ending note. While it may be short, so far, i think you did a great job of setting these characters and surrounding with enough mystery to almost forget about the few negatives. I will say though, that character development and their general attitudes might need some work.

I would keep working on this story

Quite an interesting read. Fanciful with a dark side, but more of a tinge of the ominous and bizarre than the flat-out horror that's more common these days. The dreamlike nature of the beautiful insanity contained in this Kingdom... Realm... whatever it may be is refreshing and stimulating to the mind and the senses. And is this a hint of the essence of the Yellow/Cthulhu Mythos that I sense? Marvelous. I dearly hope that this will be continued soon, and that it will continue to meet the fine expectations that I have for it.

Good

It's an excellent start, but incomplete, so only a 5/8. I hope you make more like this though!

Not the best but not the worst. . .

I actually really like the story and would like you to continue it.

I like it, a lot. It's very interesting and I hope you would continue the story. Don't get too conscious of your writing. It's really great. :)

A great game with so much potential.

I need to have more choices!! Otherwise, it was great!

I NEED MOAR.

Really good story. I do hope you finish it soon. I think it has great potential as a story.

I rated it an 8. I loved it. I felt like it was a bit short, but other than that, it was grand! I would love it if you would check out my story game ChooseYourLife and comment on it. Thanks!

Finish it!!!

It was good!

Interesting. Go ahead and complete it.

Wish there was more. Kinda leaves you hanging.

please, for the love of your favorite deity. finish it.

Really enjoyed this, you need to finish it as soon as possible :D

Interesting, well written, I look forward to reading it in completed form.

I think it's brilliant, reminds me of Endmaster's work. You should definitely finish it, I'm dying for more!! 8/8

Finish the storygame.....please? :D :D

Great story! Please finish it HERE though! It's the only place I can read these!

You're totally wrong. The story is excellent, besides a couple of bugs and minor irritable things. 8/8. I wanna see a sequel to this! Keep it up!

SORRY you say you're not happy with it well i simply must disagree, this piece was a great read and i was disappointed when it ended. id highly recommend you to continue this as you are wrong!! its good believe me. please continue.

you should try to finish it. its got a great story line just needs a couple parts added to the end

I really liked it, and its sad that your not going to continue it, I just used up a hour reading this..

I really enjoyed reading it, I look forward to the next installment

I liked it alot. However, the only thing that kept me from rating this story any higher was the fact that you left it half done! Finish the story and then I'll be happy.

shit there are no choices

It has potential, work on the story and i'm sure it'll be better

Finish. There is alot of writing there for what i consider mundane things. e.g. shopping lol. also i find it hard to read as its just a big chunk of writing at points

I wished this could've gone on...
Great story, although a little queer and loopy.

I like the over all feel. It has a few minor problem; sometimes a word is missing or misspelled, but overall it's a good piece of work. I would love to see how the characters develop and the story ends.

lol double message

This is actually pretty amazing... its got the potential to be up there with endmasters eternal. Finish it! Seriously, you can't leave it half done, you'll have me baying for blood, just like George r r Martin has with his game of thrones series. Iv already thought up a million endings, and to be honest, what you have so far could be barely a scratch on the surface. If you ever get writers block, feel free to mail me and I would b

This is a good story. Nice job.

... -very- intriguing so far. You have me thoroughly curious. I'd love to see more.

like the potential. A tiny bit too straightforward and linear. That is easy to fix though.

Just so you know, the character's are very life-like even if you get to meet them for a moment. I think you should post a link to this story in the forums for feed-back from the rest of the members.