The Murderous Masseur

Player Rating4.56/8

"#356 overall, #29 for 2017"
based on 51 ratings since 06/20/2017
played 475 times (finished 56)

Story Difficulty5/8

"run through the jungle"

Play Length4/8

"A well spent lunch break"

Maturity Level6/8

"I'll need to see some identification"
Some material may be inappropriate for persons under age 16. If this were a movie, it would probably between PG-13 and R.

This is a story game where you play as a detective assigned to the case of a serial killer who has claimed the lives of five victims. The man you are looking for lures them in claiming to be a masseur, but darker things await his clientele. There are many different outcomes that can happen here, the best being catching the murderer and having an overall good relationship with your partner. You can also die in this story, so be careful with your choices.

Player Comments

Nice suspense and a nice ending which you can add more to later.
-- Reywalker786 on 5/18/2019 7:11:33 AM with a score of 940
This was really good, with only a few grammatical errors. Personally, I loved it and I would definitely suggest it to others.
-- mirkwood on 1/13/2019 6:10:13 PM with a score of 1080
-- Marneptunez on 12/20/2018 4:48:04 PM with a score of 1520
I really enjoyed the game.
-- Faervel on 5/3/2018 5:29:46 PM with a score of 1335
This was a well created game. Some of the text on the pages was very long, and it took a while to read. Also, this game wasn’t that difficult, too be honest, and required mostly common sense in a way in my opinion. Overal though, a fun story.
-- SlapHappy on 2/22/2018 9:56:50 AM with a score of 1170
Dude seriously use a spell checker. Spelling errors all over the place.

-- jcury on 8/4/2017 5:23:10 PM with a score of 1550
This was actually pretty interesting. Few grammar errors here and there, but did not detract from story. It was a good mystery, nice job ??
-- dischead on 6/24/2017 10:00:04 PM with a score of 1500
I really wish this had been proof read and edited. There's a solid story here with some decent writing, but encountering so many spelling and punctuation errors throughout the entire thing was frustrating.

I'd recommend the author check the Grammarly link in my profile for a crash course in how dialogue is meant to be punctuated in particular. That's something that always seems to trip people up and this story is no exception. (And though this is more subjective, I'd tone it down a little on the actual dialogue tags too. A simple 'he said' is all that's needed 90% of the time. When you start getting into odd descriptors like 'he patronized' or over-rely on adverbs with things like 'he suggested sadly' you're usually telling instead of showing, and it's a distraction that weakens your writing.)

Anyway, as I said this was pretty well written, and definitely a sign of a lot of promise from a first time author, though the plot was unfortunately pretty much entirely linear. I feel like it's got to be some kind of crime against mystery fiction to spell out who the killer is in both the title and description as well. Still I hope to see more stories from this author, and I expect they'll improve as they continue writing.
-- mizal on 6/23/2017 11:50:08 AM with a score of 1345
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